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RAM
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0 posted 2000-03-30 03:19 PM


              Revolution


The rhythm of my words is now a charm;
you forged it from the meaning of my needs.
You drive the rhythm of my compassed heart
and bridge the distances between its beats.

Come rhyme the mystic whispers of my thoughts;
complete in them the treasures not yet formed.
Breathe life into old misty, silent shrouds.
as our unjournaled days are richly born.

You match the rhythm of my lucky breaths.
You are the holder of my seasoned dreams.
You bring the rhythms of the world, and press
the richness of your own so mine is freed.

And, when our whispers mute the world with "now"
they'll spin it safely in tomorrow's vows.

©  RAM  2/11/00


© Copyright 2000 RAM - All Rights Reserved
Corinne
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1 posted 2000-03-30 07:09 PM


Serenely beautiful, RAM

Thank you for posting this.

Corinne

hoot_owl_rn
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2 posted 2000-03-30 10:21 PM


Very beautiful  
CherylLynnMckee
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3 posted 2000-03-30 11:05 PM


beautiful poem...excellent!

 

Meadowmuse
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4 posted 2000-03-30 11:14 PM


To say that this is a rhythmic treasure would be quite an understatement.

The rhythm of your words most definitely is a "charm."

Very well crafted work here!

~ Claire

Corinne
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5 posted 2000-03-31 09:53 AM


this one slid by too quickly, so back to the top with you!

RAM
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6 posted 2000-03-31 01:27 PM


Thank you, Corinne, and you're welcome.
Thank you Hoot, Cheryl, Claire.
and thanks for recycling me, Corinne.

renew, reuse, recycle    

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