Open Poetry #6 |
The Ash Trees |
Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
The ash trees loom silently < !signature-->O'er the mellow green Fallen leaves drift gently Their vibrance now unseen. The scent of crystal rain Mingles with my tears My empty soul slides downward For remembrance is so mere. I sink to my trembling knees And gently trace your name As I touch the granite stone My pain cannot be tamed. I cry out to the heavens And beg to go on with you For how can life continue When a soul is torn in two? The gentle ash trees watch As my love is swept away And my fragile spirit crumbles Beneath this rain-brushed day. I wrote this because I had a dream last night about the one person I love more than anything passing away. The feeling really shook me. *Krista Knutson* ~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~ [This message has been edited by Alwye (edited 03-27-2000).] |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
It must have been a very vivid dream...you tell it well...so glad it's only a dream! |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Great writing Krista, it's too bad such great writing comes from such scary nightmares. I really liked this one. Thanks for letting us take a look. Abrahm Simons Put one foot on the path of life and tread the dagger's path betwixt dark and light. |
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Lucius Cade Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 235Saskatchewan |
Quite an interesting dream it must have been. I do study dreams, and inturpret them, so if you have any questions, or would like to explain the dream in detail I could help you decifer what it means for you. Lucidity is the answer to all problems |
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Michael
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since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, this is so sad, krista. Wonderful imagery... I almost felt like I was there. Beautiful and dark. Lovely poem. Michael |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wonderfully well written Alwye - good job! 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Martie- Yes, I'm quite glad it was only a dream..and as most dreams do, it faded. Thanks for you comments. Dusk- Well, you're welcome for havin a look, my friend...but the question is, do you really want to know what lays in the recesses of this mind? Lucius- Hmm, that could indeed be interesting..thanks for your comments also. Michael- Thank you so much, my friend. It means a lot coming from you. Severn- Thank you! *Krista Knutson* ~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Alwye~ This is very, very lovely. It flows so gently with sincerity. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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