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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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Shadows gently stir Voices waft and whisper Floating, streaming, weaving Among the grains of doubt The wind is colored grey- All is unsettled. Moans are strongly purged Draped in scarlet fear Yearning, wanting, feeling Needing to dissolve the pain The sky is closing in- The tempest is created. Emotional inferno ensues Lighted with chaotic flame Licking, hissing, teasing Watching tender life collapse The earth strangled and torn- Peace is savagely murdered. Fire is slowly calmed When droplets of regret form Sliding, tracing, falling Laced with darkened sadness The air is thickly hazed- Tears begin to flood. Ghosts of the past cry Eyes grow slightly chilled Wandering, hoping, waiting Wanting to renew again But the wind is colored grey- All remains unsettled. *Krista Knutson* ~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~ |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
oh, I loved this one Krista! I loved your dark theme and especially loved the third line of each verse. That was a big hook, it drew me in even more. Wonderful work Krista. Abrahm Simons Put one foot on the path of life and tread the dagger's path betwixt dark and light. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Alwye~ A very, very interesting piece. Deep and pensive. 'Draped in scarlet fear' What a vivid phrase. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wild and dark, enjoyed the read! Corinne |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nicely done krista  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully expressed, as always, Krista! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Moans are strongly purged Draped in scarlet fear Yearning, wanting, feeling Needing to dissolve the pain The sky is closing in- The tempest is created. ---------------- Fire is slowly calmed When droplets of regret form Sliding, tracing, falling Laced with darkened sadness The air is thickly hazed- Tears begin to flood. Ghosts of the past cry Eyes grow slightly chilled Wandering, hoping, waiting Wanting to renew again But the wind is colored grey- All remains unsettled. ------------------- wow, the sharp dark imagery of this is excellent and the emotional imagery is perfection. VERY well written... take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all very much. *Krista Knutson* ~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~ |
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