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The Snowflake |
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seti@home Junior Member
since 1999-11-28
Posts 24 |
The Snowflake A snowflake cradled in his mother’s arms said one day of the world down below, why he remained with his mother, when all his friends had left. She said unto him “That the rest had left long ago to visit the world, so different than their own, a cloud” His mother held him tightly, and drew him close to her bussom. She held his hand, and said to her son “Never leave my side” The bond and love between them, the warmth that binded them together was strong. but the lure of the city lights was too great an adventure for this little snowflake to ignore. One night as his mother slept He quietly left his mothers embrace and glanced down at the City below. The wind whispered words that played on his sense of adventure, to lure the snowflake away from his mothers bussom. The wind said “ That his friends were waiting for him down below” His mother awoke to find her son no longer with her She called out to him “Where are you, are you hiding?” She smiled as she thought that he was playing a game of hide and seek, but it soon became a frantic cry. The wind was heard to laugh, and this directed his mother to the edge of the cloud. There she saw her son on the ground below, his flakes beginning to crumble, his imminent demise, the fading sparkle. The love of a mother for her son, was too great, but rather than remain alone on the cloud, than to live and know that she left him to die, she took a leap of love and joined her son downward way. Their final minutes were spent together on the roadside. She gazed lovingly into her son’s eyes, and kissed his brow. She asked him not to be afraid and that all will be well. He closed his little crystal eyes, and so, she softly whispered stories of great snowflakes in the sky, until they each melted away. “Love is the most powerful, enduring, and eternal force that if we are touched by it, it changes us forever” I’ve never wrote anything that was so moving as this, its left me with a lump in my throat! |
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Ravenlearns2fly Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 71 |
Oh my GOD sniff sniff. This was so beautiful it brought tears 2 my eyes. I ran out of the room and gave my daughter a hug. thank you for sharing this wonderful part of your heart. Raven oh man I need a klenex. so good this was. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seti~ I can empathize with the lump in your throat, I have one also. This is really quite, quite powerful. Showing love's intensity and unselfishness. How very tender is your render. LOVE IT ! Hope you are inspired to post more. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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seti@home Junior Member
since 1999-11-28
Posts 24 |
many thanks to you both for your kind words |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a very touching tale, Seti. I enjoyed reading it! Denise |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Seti, This touched my heart so much!! Simply beautiful...would someone please pass me a kleenex!! Very good, you write with such sensitivity, and powerful emotions. AMY  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I could imagine reading this to lots of little children as a bedtime story, they would love it.. HUGS |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Powerful is love! You've showed that with an awesomeness here! Great work! |
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