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Fallen Heart (any title suggestions would be appreciated)
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Fallen Heart (any title suggestions would be appreciated) |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I sit here in rapt fascination, At a fallen heart's one inclination. To hold on to fear, When another draws near, Showing love in minutest degree. Once bitten twice shy, so they say. We live it, each our own way. But finding true love, Is a gift from above, Will it find you or just pass you by? If you can't face the chance you must take, Because once you had made a mistake. The love that is true, Will be lost from your view. There in, lies the worst wounding blow |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
It must be a tough spot to be in. You have expressed that well in this piece! I'm not sure of a title. If I can come up with something I'll let you know! Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
How about "Life's Greatest Mistake" "To Face True Love" "Face Love, Embrace Love" "In the Face of Love" "Don't Lose the Best" "Undeniable" Oh, well. I tried. Whatever the title, the poem is great! Liz |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
"Love's Second Chance" Love is lovlier the second time around just as wonderful with both feet on the ground its that second time you hear your love song sung, makes you think, that love like youth is wasted on the young, Loves more comfortable, the second time you fall, like a friendly home, the second time you call, there are those who'll bet love comes but once and yet, you'll be so glad you met on the second time around. lyrics from "Second Time Around". A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Danny, Perfect title, "Love's Second Chance" Liz |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I love your message here, Marilyn... We just can't go through life blaming the next for the shortcomings of the previous, ya know?... and so many do..  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Marilyn~ Lovely thoughts you've penned. I like it very much. Borrowing from Danny's idea ... I would suggest 'Second Time Around' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Marilyn I think a nice title would be one of the following although you already have a title now called Fallen Heart. But anyway: A chance, take a chance, Love's chance, A chance to Love. Very close to Dannys idea. James |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It's a wonderful poem, Marilyn. How about "Wipe the slate clean"? or "double exposure" |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Love that song Once bitten twice shy baby.... Great poem Marilyn...though I like the title's offered and couldn't give ya one for this...sorry. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Marilyn, I can totally relate to this as you know. I rather like Danny's suggestion too  |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I like Danny's idea for your title too ..... A beautifully written piece that speaks to me .... L., Shannon |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Marilyn: I too like Danny's choice but it might not be 2nd, could 5th or 10th..LOL...I only hope it gets better the higher the number.. HUSG |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Thankyou all for your replies and suggestions. Danny...thankyou for the lovely response. James...yes I put a title on this piece but was not satisfied with it. That is why I asked for suggestions. Rainbow....That is very true. It doesn't matter the number of times we have tried to find love but that someday we do find it. The only thing is with each attempt we lose a little more hope and burry ourselves deeper behind our walls. *sigh* What do you think of "Another Chance for Love" or "Love's Other Chance." ? |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
" Loves Other Chance " ... sounds right to me, Marilyn ... |
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