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The Iron Gate
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The Iron Gate |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
The Iron GateThere lies, beyond sight, a glistening gate Its structure, not brilliant, nor design ornate but just there, out of view, it beckons to me past honeysuckle, magnolia and marmalade tree What brings me along to this path every day, I've oft'times reflected but still cannot say As my footsteps fall lightly, the gate comes to view and my thoughts, with each journey, settle softly to you For your eyes captivate as the gate's vines enlace the iron, hard and strong as the lines of your face but on each reaching bar lies a soft ivy train And with my gentle approach sweeps to open again.  Claire |
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Chris Goodman Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 92Issaquah, Washington usa |
THIS IS AWESOME! ONE OF THE BEST I HAVE READ IN A LONG TIME. I must print and hang on wall. I love it. Right up my alley. CHRIS (totally impressed) Blue Moon |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
The pictures you create are always impressive, I agree! Very well done, Claire! Denise |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I wish I could write like this...like you always do...wow. I'm not worthy....LOL |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Ooooh, excellent work Claire. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ Extraordinaire ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Claire this is lovely..your precise description leaves me wanting to also see this gate and experience your warm thoughts along with you. Really would like to see those beautiful trees. James |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*sigh* what a lovely way to start my day...(smile) perfection as always Claire...your words paint portraits of emotional beauty jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Lovely poem Claire from Poeminister |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Exquisite!! You make me see with your eyes and want to write with your perception. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thanks, in earnest, to all who read and responded to this little piece...it's so nice to be able to share with you all in this way. ~ Claire |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Poetry at its finest! And I will remember this whenever I chance upon an iron gate. What a wonderful image. And of course, great writing Liz |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"What brings me along to this path every day, I've oft'times reflected but still cannot say" I like the whole thing, but this line is striking..  [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 03-18-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Extremely beautiful, Claire  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I have to agree with Nan on this one Claire. . . that line struck me as well. . .who knows how or why we take the paths that we do? We can only follow the heart, and be led, and hope that what lies at the end is happiness. . . Simply wonderful my frined. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Breathless in the beauty .. Claire, I love looking through your eyes ... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Liz, thank you so much, for so much. Nan, I'm glad you liked this piece...thank you for your warm response! Balladeer, thank you. So glad to know you enjoyed this. Sven, yes, to follow one's heart...thank you for reading and letting me know. Pepper, what a thing to say...how kind. Thank you. ~ Claire |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
A wonderful evocation of both the easy joy and subtle fear of what awaits behind the gate. As always, thanks for sharing; you always impress me with yr words. Mike |
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