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A Smiling Face
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A Smiling Face |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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I don't want you to know I can be sad So I will always make you laugh instead I don't want you to know that I can hurt I don't want you to know what's in my head We can laugh and pull up daisies now I'll try not to dwell on their sudden death You might recite a moving monologue In secret I think its a waste of breath I love you it's all I hold onto now Though you don't amuse me like you did Maybe I was looking for something wrong While we played hide and seek I always hid You might think I was a fool to believe That a smiling face meant a happy heart Well if its contagious you got it now Might I think inside you too are dark |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Walt, wow, aren't we writing some serious stuff. I like this side of you...I love that line that a smile doesn't always mean a happy heart! It sure don't. Great writing!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
A strong message, tinged with melancholia...well written, Walt. ~ Claire |
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BluesforNarada Junior Member
since 2000-03-02
Posts 13 |
How serious can you get? But touching! Great work - let's see more of this kind. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
OK - I'll accept an occasional serious work - because you're good at 'em.... This one has a wonderful message.. But don't put your humorous quill away for too long, OK???  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
W.O.W.~ How intriguing is this ? Amazingly so. You've really got some marvelous lines in here. 'We can laugh and pull up daisies now I'll try not to dwell on their sudden death' 'While we played hide and seek I always hid' I am convinced that I like it very much. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
yuh sometimes skippy sometimes sad tiz the spice o life |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great writing! Nathan |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
We can't be happy all the time that's for sure! But smiling sometimes gets you there! Denise |
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