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This Night
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This Night |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Through the falling rain, a freight train mourns. Such is my heart, without you, this night. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This is just...I can just feel this. From those few words I got such an impression of images...wow, Inclan - thanks. And hugs for it is a sad one. 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you, Severn. I am honored by your response. INclan |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is voluminous beauty in a mere sprinkling of words, INClan. The feeling here is acute and shared so well. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
INclan~ This is hauntingly lovely. I could even hear strains of Hank Williams, Sr. singing 'I'm So Lonesome I Could Cry' Now that's vivid. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you so much, meadowmouse and Marge. A late night inspiration while working away from my family. I am glad that you enjoyed my work. Mmmmmmmmm....I hear that distant train again, outside my office window, and it is still raining this morning. INclan |
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Joannak Member
since 2000-03-11
Posts 121Indiana, USA |
INclan, what beautiful thoughts... as a matter of fact, I think I can hear the train whistle now... jk |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The best things come in small packages. This is among the best Liz |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I can feel this too....wow. I've heard trains off in the distance "mourning"...it also gives me a sad yearning feeling too. You captured this well.  Alot of emotion packed in this short epic! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
These few words say so much. Well done! Denise |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Sad, but beautiful INclan...I could really relate to this as I live sort of near (but not TOO near the tracks...) I like 'em short, by the way, as long as it says it all, which this did. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
There can be few sadder sounds than a train whistle on a lonely night, fading into the distance....leaving. Excellent words. |
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Ravenlearns2fly Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 71 |
oooo!!! very nice in deed. Raven |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thank you ALL for your kind words and encouragement. INclan |
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