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Sven
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0 posted 2000-03-13 11:09 PM


Fly noble falcon, soar among the stars
Fly to him who holds my heart this night
Let the winds guide you in your flight
To the safety of his arms

Shelter him with night's protective cover
Protect his life and guide his way
So that he may see the light of day
And come to know the face of I, his lover

Fly noble falcon, sing of this lonely Star Maiden
Tell him the one whose heart he now holds
Was once sad, hard, and cold
And very much with bitterness laden

But now noble Falcon, sing to him of my love
A love as far reaching as the galaxy
And as deep and silent as the sea
With his heart I will always be, keeping him safe from above.

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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1 posted 2000-03-14 01:26 AM


That's so beautiful, Sven!     I love it!
-molly aka sam

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2 posted 2000-03-14 01:33 AM


Regardless of the challenge, I'd have to say that this was beautiful Sven...emotion is your specialty!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


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3 posted 2000-03-14 10:03 AM


This soars among the stars Sven! Very beautifully and free to soar.

Nicely done

Denise
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4 posted 2000-03-14 04:14 PM


This is beautiful, Sven!  

Denise

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5 posted 2000-03-14 04:36 PM


Yes, Sven, lovely, but I've yet to see anything written by you that wasn't.

Corinne

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6 posted 2000-03-14 05:23 PM


Hey, good work, Sven! You certainly rose to the challenge--this was exquisite.

Elizabeth

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-The Crucible


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7 posted 2000-03-14 05:38 PM


Very beautiful Sven, loved it.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



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8 posted 2000-03-14 06:32 PM


~Sven

Breathtaking! This one really was up there among one of my favorites from you. You have such a lovely way with words that really speaks to the soul. Thanks for sharing with us!

Amy  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

Sven
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9 posted 2000-03-14 08:46 PM


Thank you all my friends. . .

It's very wonderful that my writing can speak to all of you the way that yours does to me. . .

Sam, Denise, thank you. . .

Devina, I have always been in touch with my emotions. . .

Shelley, I love to soar. . .

Corinne, your comment is likely to give me a big head!!  LOL

Elizabeth, yours will be forthcoming. . .

DA, glad that you enjoyed. . .

Aimster, thank you very much. . .from my soul to yours. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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10 posted 2000-03-14 09:53 PM


Oh my!  What a lovely poem!  Thank you so much for it!     And by someone of your talent...

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."



Sven
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11 posted 2000-03-15 11:09 PM


Astraea...

You are welcome. . . glad that you liked it. . .and thank you for the challenge. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 2000-03-16 11:42 AM


You soar with this one Sven  
Lone Wolf
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13 posted 2000-03-16 09:44 PM


Wow.....very well done Sven.  Nice use of imagery.  I love it!!!!
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14 posted 2000-03-16 10:57 PM


Extremely beautiful and well written.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Only when trudging through the soul's darkest midnight can one truly appreciate the glory of the sunrise*~



Sven
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15 posted 2000-05-28 03:35 AM


Bringing this one back in honor of Astraea's return!!!

Welcome back my friend!!!

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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