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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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she flowed out of the car one smooth leg after the other with liquidity and grace her sex appeal dripped from head to toe as she poured across the concrete and at the crook of her finger men splash at her knees spewing words of undying love begging for just one drip and I look down at my jeans and comfortable shoes and suddenly I don't feel... wet enough [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-10-2000).] |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Corazon~ you have no idea how well I can relate to this. Wonderful! You did an excellent job with this one! I have felt that way most of my life. Thank you for posting this!  -SEA |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Well I feel like a damn desert!!! LOL. (Where's Toe... he'll solve that problem! *S*) This one packs a sizzle... |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
This poem has a messge that says a lot about how men and women interact and explains many of the actions that come from how sex appeal is used and how men respond to it. I believe this poem should be required reading for all passion participants. Well, i'm thinking out loud and it's one man's opinion. Well written! Danny |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
LOL...I had to look to see if I was in the right forum.. HUSG The grape passes through the press to yield wine. Your life must pass through the press of passion and pain to yield the wine of wisdom.. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
lol yep, have just had my world rocked lately and it seems I am questioning everything... thanks all |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Corazon, this is one terrific piece of writing. The similes all fit together perfectly in the theme. You nailed this one so well. I love it. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Her sex appeal dripped from head to toe...quite an image there!!!(are we in adult???lol) This was wonderfully written...it just FLOWED gracefully m'dear...I loved it!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Adriahh Junior Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 18 |
Surprising, nice..good flow  |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Oh BOY! Did it just get warm in here?...Yikes! I just got done commenting to your "What ifs"...and then I see this...*picking herself up*..You bowled me over here! This is GREAT!  )Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
devina, thanks, flowing is a good compliment for this one huh? lol lj, you know your compliments always mean much to me, so thank you much Adriahh, thanks breathe, I love your poems too, so this is nice to hear |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corazon, Enjoyed this one very much. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Very interesting approach at describing our good days and our bad days...good job! Enjoyed this very much. Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Corazon, Looks like its raining all over the world! drippin' with sensuality, this is! Corinne |
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Wizzard Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 209 |
Well it looks like it`s back to the shower for me Nice Job Corazon  Today is the first day of the rest of your life. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
From one who is washed up frequently, I can relate very well. I love the images. I can see them clearly in my mind. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely, so lovely. You got my heart all excited and pumping. Ven a mi corazon. James |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all, how funny this one is doing so well, it just flowed out...no working at it...lol sometimes those are the best and jmlee...love that...thanks...but my whole name should be corazon espinado...sigh...got lots of healing to do.... |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Enjoyed this very much, Corazon Leaves one wanting a second verse or perhaps we can just drool one up ourselves Rex}<{{{{o> |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Nice poem you have created For me beauty comes in many ways shapes and forms And everybody has it Wet or dry That's through me eyes Nevertheless, Well done Corazon. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I could see every bit of you....and from what I know of you, I think you could splash them all a bit |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
I loved it. It was fresh and entertaining. The title is really intriguing. Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I agree with you, that some of the best poems are the uninhibited ones you just kinda throw out onto paper. I really enjoyed this. Definitely one poem that I know would be even more benefited by being read out loud. Thanks for sharing. Mike |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon- Liquid ... wonderfully done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Yep - I love it...!! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all, and hoot, yep, you might be right, its just I haven't been feeling it lately....hiding under a basket so to speak lol bsquirrel....thanks, glad you liked... nan |
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