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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2000-03-12 08:30 AM


           Life is a wife

The best for me will ring a bell,
The rest can all, just go to hell.
It is the banner that some wave.
Perhaps a seeker, or a knave.

I've seen the banner in the flack,
I've felt its touch upon my back.
I've heard its voice in simple say,
I've seen it pass along the way.

Where lies the petals of the rose.
I sniff the air the perfumes pose.
I've learned the odors of request,
Acknowledging the very best.

I do not say them false or true,
This is an answer up to you.
I only say beware the beast.
That offers up the most for least.

Appraise, your answers in your life,
For your answer will be your wife.


© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 2000-03-12 09:21 AM


Excellent Sy! I really like this. You nailed the meter and rhymes.  
Marilyn
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2 posted 2000-03-12 09:25 AM


Wonderful Sy! The lesson is clear and the meter smooth, the rhyme is well done. hmmm I wish I could write like this.  
Martie
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3 posted 2000-03-12 12:57 PM


Wise words!  Wonderful poem!
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4 posted 2000-03-12 02:34 PM


Seymour~
Such wonderful thoughts.
Wise and true.
A wise man knows it to be so.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Nate Dogg
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5 posted 2000-03-12 03:50 PM


You words speak of great wisdom and I will indeed use the wonderful tips that you give!

 Nathan

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6 posted 2000-03-12 04:05 PM


....beware the beast that offers up the most for least.....great line Sy!!
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2000-03-12 10:06 PM


Poet deVine, Thank you for the excellent my friend. *L*

Marilyn, You can write like that, thanks for the beautiful comment.

Martie, Thank you for the wonderful. *L*

Marge, Thank you and love you too. Sy

Nate, You welcome to the tips, thanks for the comment.

Balladeer, You sure caught the best line.

tracie66
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8 posted 2000-03-12 10:11 PM


Sy great job
well said
tracie


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devina
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9 posted 2000-03-12 10:17 PM


You get the sweetheart award with this one Sy, twas very touching!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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