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poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

0 posted 2000-03-09 07:02 PM

~ Sucking Seawater Sucks ~

When life deals me a crappy hand
I stick my head down in the sand
I tell the seagulls I'm okay -
and they squawk back, "No freakin' way!"

I've always had to be real strong
Just shirk it off when things go wrong
But I'm not feeling strong no more -
I'm headed for the nearest shore!

When I get there, I'm jumpin' in
A concrete block tied to my limb (ankle didn't rhyme)
Saltwater burns, I must admit -
But right now I don't give a .....er......crap!

It burns my nose, my throat, my eyes
And suddenly - I realize...
My situation wasn't bleak
Till I went on this "deathwish" streak!

I flail about - I'm sinking now
I must untie that knot somehow!
I'm sucking in - seawater fast
I don't know if I'm gonna last !!

...Blurble...blurble.....Bloop!

I see you as I gasp for air
You wave & shuck your underwear
You reach me in the nick of time - -

SIGH...

You want my towel?
Too bad - it's MINE!

(Batting eyes & dangling his undies in the air! )

Yeah, I know - rediculous waste of ink...I'm putting my pen down now, and am gonna go rearrange my shoes or something more constructive....sigh. Thank you hero!

signed - flailingFemmeFatale
March 9, 2000

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

1 posted 2000-03-09 07:27 PM

Ah, never a dull moment with you around! Cute poem..though I was worried at first..then realized that the 'unsinkable FemmeFatale' would find a way out of this! Good job!

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

2 posted 2000-03-09 10:40 PM

Come on Femme. . . I know that it CAN'T be all that bad, can it?

This was fun just the same. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

3 posted 2000-03-09 10:45 PM

hehe Yeah, you said THAT right! I too have felt like that woman in Titanic...what's her name? The Unsinkable Molly somebody? LOL It's so funny you should say that! hehe Much of my inspiration has come from that movie of late!

Glad you liked...will take a strange crowd to welcome this er.....poem! Got tired of being so serious today! Thanks PdV....you've always liked my weird side.

** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000!

poetFemmeFatale
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since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

4 posted 2000-03-09 10:45 PM

Oopps...got a little carried away on the Submit button....(drumming fingers in impatience!) LOL

Sven - - Well, it could be BETTER! (sticking tongue out atcha! )

[This message has been edited by poetFemmeFatale (edited 03-09-2000).]

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2000-03-10 12:51 PM

Hi pFF (I'm laaaaazy).

I enjoyed this poem -- fun to read. What I didn't believe though, was any actual desperation of the character. It seemed candy-coated, meant for a laugh, not reflection. And I think that's what you were going for anyway, so I can't complain too much. Just a little.

Mike

RSEvans
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since 1999-10-23

Posts 1147
Tulsa, OK, USA

6 posted 2000-03-10 06:44 AM

###throwing pFF a dingy...### see you on the shore sis!

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15

Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK

7 posted 2000-03-10 11:58 AM

I'm there to give you CPR (mouth to mouth) and to help you out of those wet clothes.
Can't let a lovely lady as yourself take the deep six!
Next time your headed for the nearest shore, give a shout. Fun in the sand you know.

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