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A Kosovan Tale
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A Kosovan Tale |
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pmc Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 48Germany |
A Kosovan Tale. He stood beside his Father as we burst into his home. He had his chance to run, but he wouldn't go alone. He stood beside his Father though we beat him with a gun, He tried his best to fight. I couldn't make him run. He stood beside his Father as we pushed him to the wall His legs gave way beneath him and yet he didn't fall. He stood beside his Father when he knew they were to die. Tears were in his eyes and still he didn't cry. He stood beside his Father in the house where he was born. He died beside his father. We buried them at dawn. Patrick McFadden 21 June 1999 |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
This poem has the impact of a bullet in my chest. I think I will be weeping for a while. |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
ouch! This strikes close to the bone. Such a simple poem, but what an impact! Kudos to you poet for stirring that within us. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Magnificent tale. Welcome to the family! I love this poem because I can feel it! Please check your email!  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PMC~ Stirring. Welcome to Passion's. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is a very interesting and a well written poem. Could you please tell me a little bit more of the background behind this poem. My son was stationed in Albania for a period of time during this conflict which is actually still in progress so I followed the events with interest. James |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Welcome Pat! It is nice to have you here, and what a post for your first one! Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow! This hurt my heart. |
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pmc Junior Member
since 2000-03-09
Posts 48Germany |
Thank you all for your comments. To answer jmlee. I wrote the poem after listening to a TV report in which a Kosovan mother explained how she and her other children were allowed to escape but that her eldest son who was twelve had refused to come and had remained with his father. She was looking for their bodies. pmc |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Oh my, disturbing, sensational, sad, respectful post, pmc. Welcome to Passions. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Welcome to Passions pmc...wonderfully emotional post. Looking forward to reading more of your work. Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
This is very powerful pmc. Might I make a suggstion though? on the very last line, instead of We buried them at dawn. how about We buried them next morn. That keeps almost the exact same message, and rhymes much better with born. Just a suggestion, in no way do you have to take it. Again, Excellent poem. |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Welcome to Passions. A very moving poem...I liked the way you bring out the best and worst of humanity all in the same piece. WEll Done, Inclan |
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Diana B Member
since 2000-03-10
Posts 97 |
powerful writing...haunting message...good work |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Patrick this is an excellent format and very touching...thanks for the explanation...I'm going to e-mail a copy of this to my son in Germany. James [This message has been edited by jmlee12345 (edited 03-11-2000).] |
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