Open Poetry #6 |
Love Sometimes |
PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Just one more word One more breath One more dirge That I might cheat death Sometimes in dreaming Time stops streaming I must be dreaming These thoughts conceiving Just one more wish One more night One more kiss To set things right Missing the ghost of you again Here you come again Back to where we begin This night will never end Just one more time One more day One more night Before I throw it away Sometimes in trying We both are left dying I hear you crying And vainly keep trying Guilty of expressionless crimes Both of us, sometimes (For my buddy. She knows who she is) |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
JML~ Wow. Love it. -SEA |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Missing the ghost of you again Here you come again Back to where we begin This night will never end ----- Sometimes in trying We both are left dying I hear you crying And vainly keep trying Guilty of expressionless crimes Both of us, sometimes" Jer, I LOVE this one...its sorta "cryptic" and also has this emotional longing weaved with in it... I love the last lines...and I SO relate...very nice... stalking you always...with "intrigue"... jm you're really alone at last... you're bored and fading fast, if it's true you'll fall from the past all you'll have to do is ask you'll feel but never be you want and always need price you pay for wanting to see will you have all you've ever dreamed... robin wilson |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks SEA, you always make me feel good. Janet, I gotta be cryptic. Can't give away too many things...Cryptic and emotional longing...i like that description. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Well, somebuddy oughta really like this....Wow. It's beautiful - you said it so well, I can feel your longing and see the tears. Wish you both well, and hope you find happiness. Seems we're all looking for the same thing around here! Hope there's enough to go around! LOL |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JML~ This line speaks volumes. 'Guilty of expressionless crimes Both of us, sometimes' Hope someone is listening. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
for library file |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I think, yes, I do believe, you need to write a book, just so I can keep you under my pillow... |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Again, loved it! A quarter of a century must pass, for the writer to understand what and why he writes. |
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