Open Poetry #5 |
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Just For Awhile |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Just one more time to hear your voice < !signature-->Just one more time to have that choice Just one more time to see your face Just one more day…in time and space. Just one more time to show I care Just one more day our time to share Just one more time to see your smile Just one more time…just for awhile. Oh, just once more without this pain Just once more together again Oh, just once more to be not sad Oh, once more…to have what I had. Oh, just once more to hear you say “Stop by dear, if you’re up this way!” Oh, just once more to see you smile Oh, just once more…just for awhile. …just one more time …just one more day …oh, just once more …just for awhile In memory of my Father Francis B. Corbley January 23, 1925 - January 13, 1998 .....forever missed. Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-21-2000).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Once more, indeed. It's Been six years since my father passed but that longing never goes away. My heart is with you on this one, Denise. Michael |
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cokey_95 Junior Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 35 |
It will be 3 yrs. tom since my mom was killed...you echo my thoughts completly! |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I knew from the start [I don't know why] that this was not a love lost, but deeper - both of my parents are gone, and I know the feeling. I too, wish I had one more time just to say to them "I love you..." Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise, A lovely poem and I agree with sunshine, I too wish I had one more chance to say I loved them. *L* Sy |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I am very blessed to still have both my parents Denise.....and after reading your poem, I placed a call....just to say " I love you"... Thank you for this most moving piece... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Very, very tender and touching. Yes, it sets a person thinking. Thank you for sharing, and my heart goes out to you. I'm so very sorry for your loss. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is truly a beautiful poem, that will be a family treasure, for your children and grandchildren to know the love you still hold for your parents. It's wonderful, Denise Liz |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Denise - Such a lovely piece for a tribute for your father. Just lost my younger sister in October ... so know just how real the pain of missing a loved one can be. Bless you hon. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
A fine piece of work Lady D... I can understand the desire. I'm very lucky to still have my father about after several heart attacks, one mini-stoke, and two open hearts. I'm thankful that he is able to share in the lives of his grand daughters and give to them the future memories of a great man. My best to you and yours on this difficult day. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Such a loving and lovely poem Denise and it has brought back to me some teasured memories of my own parents, long gone. |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
a very moving piece, denise, and makes me appreciate my family more for having them still here... |
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suthern![]() ![]()
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful!! And eyes full, too. *S* |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you all for your warm words of sympathy and empathy. I appreciate it very much. Pepper-your response made me cry. I'm glad that my poem prompted you to make that call. Thanks again for your kind words. It means alot to me, my friends. Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Just read this today. Touches home! So good! DH |
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Earthtones Junior Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 10 |
I'm new here, but from the poems I've read of yours, both have touched me to the core.Simply beautiful. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I've had this feeling inside now for over eight years, scince my own father passed away. Please believe me when I tell you that this was BEAUTIFUL!!! You've touched my heart yet again Denise!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Mary Junior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 38Delaware, Ohio, USA |
Denise, I love this poem. It's been 9 years since my father passed away. It's like Michael said, the longing never goes away. Great poem!! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Thank you Danny, Earthtones, Devina and Mary for reading and commenting...death of a loved one is the hardest trial to go through. I sympathize with you in your loss as well. Thanks again for your lovely comments. Denise |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I still have my parents with me, thank God. I'm going to call them just to say I Love You. Your words are so loving.-SEA |
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Julie Senior Member
since 1999-08-20
Posts 739Houston, TX |
The anniversaries following someone we've lost seems extra hard. I know you could say just one more time could I say Happy Birthday. You write beautiful poetry about your dad...he'd be proud. Hugs for you dear Denise. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
This was beautiful.... 15 years for me this past December and I still miss him like yesterday.. |
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Denise
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Thank you SEA, Julie and Tori for your warm comments. SEA-I'm glad it inspired you to call them. I am touched. Julie- Yep, I sure did wish that. He'd be proud but mostly embarrassed by the attention, I think! Thanks! Tori- You never stop missing them, I know. You have my sympathies too. Denise |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
That's absolutely beautiful ![]() ![]() ![]() |
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Denise
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Thank you One Who Understands for your kind words! Denise |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
I will go by my Dad's house tonight to tell him i love him. you have touched me so. Thank you |
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Sonny Junior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 29Schenectady, NY, USA |
What a beautiful tribute to your father. I never really knew mine, for he died when I was three. Nowhere in my memories do I recall telling him that I loved him, nor do I remember ever holding him. But, I do know that he is watching and guiding me just as your father is surely watching and protecting you. Sonny |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Oh Denise -- what a precious gift! ![]() --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Spiked, Sonny and Kess- thank you for your kind words. Spiked- I think that's just an excellent idea. I am so grateful that this poem encouraged people to pick up the phone or make that visit while they still can. Thanks again! Denise |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Denise, thank you for this poem, I lost my father when I was just 4 and I felt an emptiness for my whole life. Though I hardly new him, with family help I was able to gather the knowledge to build great memories. They keep him near me. Parker |
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Lorelei54 Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 458 |
Makes me yearn for my Dad as well...and It has been 21 years...the time may pass and the memories dim, but the love we feel, holds within. |
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SnglDad Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 115Seattle area |
This is one that I can relate to. I would like to print this one out, if you don`t mind? This sure has brought back alot of feelings from the past. Thanx Again And God Bless Denise Joel |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Denise, oh so very beautiful! Quite touching, but you will have one more time, when it is time, for eternal life! *hugs* ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh, but could we have a second chance. This is so sad, but well written Denise ![]() ((((HUGS)))) |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Denise - I don't know what to say. I wish you could have one more time. Your poem makes me regret some of the times I've held back for one reason or another. My father passed away in the early 80's, and I never tried to have a relationship with him, though he reached out several times, including the time he met with me just before my flight to Viet Nam. I was brash and so sure I was right. Only now do I realize that it isn't being right that is important. |
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Denise
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I thank you all for reading and for your sympathetic replies. I wrote this in the midst of the darkest days of the grieving period. I had forgotten how dark those days can be. My Mom passed away when I was 18. We didn't have a chance to say 'goodbye' to her as her death was sudden and unexpected. She was only 44. Even though my Dad was almost 73 when he passed away and he had been ill off and on, his passing also took us by surprise. One of the biggest comforts to me was realizing that even though we might not have said 'I love you' as often as we should have and regret those times of youthful 'brashness', I believe Moms and Dads always know the love that their children hold for them...even if the children don't always realize the depth of that love, at times. Thanks again for your warm and caring responses. My sympathies to all of you you have also felt that pain. Denise |
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