Open Poetry #5 |
Octet #1 |
Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
In the spring, the rose begins to bud Deep inside the cloak of mysteries The turning of the round clock's hands Is but centripetal motion. The weaving of the spider's web Sets my thoughts to spinning They spin the dreams of yesteryear Which are only just beginning. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Wendy, I loved the play on words in this one, and the way a sort of gentle spinning is evoked through the poem. Also, you're the first person I've ever (is known the right word?) who knows the difference between centrifugal and centripetal force. Lord knows I can't spell it right, though. Very clever using centripetal to, in part, describe a rose. Before I get any more incoherent, I'll just say I enjoyed the poem. Mike |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, intriguing piece, Wendy. Love the word choice and imagery, and especially the way the ending wraps up to "the beginning". Well done. Michael |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Wendy! Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Very, very nice, Wendy. I like this a lot. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
My response wraps an echoing layer around that already offered by Mike and Michael. The clock, the rose, the web...all excellently chosen here, Wendy, to symbolize the centripetal flow of one's life...all life, to be more precise. Wonderful verse! Claire |
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Wendy Flora Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 182Virginia |
thanks all. i wrote this years ago, and never could find the apropriate title... oh well. if any of you had an idea, feel free to spout. -wen |
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