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No Final Fate (DreamEvil & Severn)
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No Final Fate (DreamEvil & Severn) |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Were I to die would she shed a tear? Therein lies the question and passion's greatest fear Answers wither away beneath heated scrutiny allowing logic sway to interfere with affairs best left to the heart Though bereft of certainty with reason torn apart each passing season my own counsel do I keep and for the loss of light I weep Terror-quiet breathing lost amid the stalking of my fright I see not the author of my fear but feel its kiss perceive my mind I am naked alone with myself and the horrors of the lifely way I smile and gaze with guileless eyes and inside bleeding dry that cold stalking touch comes only from realising knowing I am alone Loneliness croons a softly seductive song meant to lure and doom those who revel in wrong and entomb crucified minds with impure and fetid designs and from the sorrow of an aching a desperation of loveless sight new fire brightly colours over me How to speak of lonely when all is hued with welcoming? This alone-girl hears and reaches voices calling slow throats soothing her deafened mind and she learns alone is not her final fate... ©2000 DreamEvil & Severn Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Soul-Brother and Butterfly, this is fantastic you two, Love the words you put together, Its Brilliant!! loved it!!  What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is WONDERFUL! I love the ending of this poem because it is so true. I feel uncertainty pulling at one end and a sunbeam tugging at the other. You two obviously understand one another. How wonderful for two talents to write together this way Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-13-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
What a nice duo you two make |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is wonderful you two , so beautiful your words together |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
This gets a standing ovation from me! It is astoundingly beautiful, and ohhhh it definitely goes into my favorites file! You two should do more collaborations...its a team that works! It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, you guys! Excellent! Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
A wonderful collaboration... Beautiful work! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh joy - I can't honestly tell you the pleasure of seeing you two collaborate on a poem together.  Michael |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
"a softly seductive song meant to lure and doom those who revel in wrong and entomb crucified minds with impure and fetid designs..." What a statement made here! I cannot believe that the two of you did not receive more response to this ... What I thought when I began reading this was nothing like the way it ended -- I love the twist in the final few lines! Excellent work, both of you -- encore!  --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
How to speak of lonely when all is hued with welcoming? Oh, I love this line, the whole poem, wonderful! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Superb teamwork! HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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