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Fair Rose |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Fair Rose, why do thee part at dawn's first light, As darkness fades, and drifts away the night? Doth morning star, forewarn thee coming sun, So with the moon, into the heavens run? What dost thou fear, what pain shall day reveal, That causes thee, into the darkness steal? Doth not thee know, that even in the day, The stars remain, and in the heavens lay? The cloak of night, for thee is but facade, Protecting not, behind high priest's ephod, Lay bare thy soul, into the light emerge, And hide thee not, from thee thy demons purge. For whilst I wait, thou presence in the night, I yearn soft touch, of Rose in glow of light. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 01-11-2000).] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Yes, the stars do not go away during the day. That very thought has never occurred to me. What a beautiful poem filled with beautiful thoughts. I enjoyed this Liz |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I agree with Elizabeth, a beautiful poem indeed!! enjoyed reading ,thank you!  What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Exquisite! So lovely! *sigh* Denise |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I thank you kindly for the three gracious replies. Glad you liked. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This craft of words, your forte', sir in obvious perfection as verse befalls your cherished rose you wax profound reflection As I, heart widened, fully flush, transfixed in soul's submission now humbly breathe fresh fragrance, thine, spellbound by such petition (...other than that, I'm speechless.)  Claire |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I too am speechless....this is extremely lovely. Do keep it up! *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Simply lovely ... I wish I had the words for an elegant poetic response, but they escape me. Will you accept instead my thanks for this vision? --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike- Absolutely lovely ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, exquisite poem Mike. Great form...great message. Simply beautiful. Michael |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Exquisite!!! Applauds!!! |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Simply awe inspiring work here, Mike! Your "Rose" poetry has always been brilliant. Bravo!! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I'm dancing on rose petals....... |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Prosecuted a father for molesting his three year old daughter this morning... the mother says he is a good father and she wants him home... was in somewhat of a sour mood (understatement) came home for lunch and turned on the puter... thanks for the very kind and gracious statements... brightened my day... Thank you all. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mike...I have to write about this...Poem to come. Thanks for sharing "Fair Rose." Enjoyed it so much. Claire |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is inspired writing Mike--If only I could write like that I would fit this reply with wonderous words, instead I'll just say wow! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Almost Shakespearian in style, very romatic! Corinne |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Very romanintic in style and message...I think you've just inspired me...well we'll see how it turns out Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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cougaryouth Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 25 |
wow that was interesting I think I might start learning that kind of talk, great way to win a girls heart huh? |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you for the gracious comments. Cougaryouth, I am afraid I will have to let you in a little secret; takes a wee bit more than words to win a girl's heart. |
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