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The recurring dream
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The recurring dream |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The recurring dream It's all in my mind just locked within And only when I'm buried in sleep, Does it image, the fair or sin. Rising the abyss of the deep. Nothing like a prison with bars, More like a bottomless pit. Whose core in black with shining stars. All locked in faults beyond my wit. And the abyss, it has no floor. Nor even a door with a key. And the wonder is even more, Then I or anyone could see. And I fret in the vigor of wait, What voyaging phantoms will sprout. For there is naught but mist as a gate. And in my mind the devil of doubt. But it always ends in the same old way. With sweat my pillow, I awake the day. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
And you took me there with you, Sy - quite a journey. What voyaging phantoms will sprout. For there is naught but mist as a gate. And in my mind the devil of doubt. These lines gave me the chills... K |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, This dream of yours is phantasy I'm glad it belongs to you and not to me You can just tell me all about it Another great poem! Liz |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is great Sy I can feel your dream  Well done |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Don't ya just love that REM sleep?... Nice one, Sy....... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I usually don't remember my dreams. Perhaps that's a good thing! Great poem! Chilling! Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, You are so kind in your coments *L* Elizabeth, The fantasy I have for thee Is much more pleasant to see. Love Sy Whiskey, I thank you for the well done. Denise, Thank you and *(L* |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Oh what a dream. I love to sleep but with dreams like this I think that would soon end  Excellent in verse as is the norm for you Drive it like you stole it...LOL |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Hope you're not fallen into deep Would miss your beautyful poems indeed This reminded me on some of my dreams great fall with a million screems Helmut The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Ah...to sleep, perhaps to dream...nice one Sy |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Freud would be interested in that you call it a dream, and not a nightmare... well done, dear Sir! |
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Dreamer_556 Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 34 |
Excellent! That sounds all too familiar! ~*Dreamer*~ |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
You took me there with you...chilling verse! Excellent work, as usual May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
First, Thank you much. Helmut, Nice comment, thank you. Hoot, Thank you hoot, your a delight. *L* Sunshine, I have my own interpretation thank you *L* Sy Dream, Thank you for the excellent. Satiate, Good comment, thank you. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yanno Sy....I thrive on being a smart ass...(I think it's because I've been corresponding with Balladeer and LongJohn so long).....and I can think of a bunch of things I could be a smartass with about this poem....but it's really just too damn good to add my BS to....Well done...you are really an amazing poet my friend.....though I don't reply to all of your stuff, I do read it, (maybe it's just jealousy, respect or envy), but I truly like your stuff.....(Then again, I envy, respect and am jealous of Balladeer's and LongJohn's stuff too, but sometimes temptation's just too damn strong to ignore)besides, you're such a nice guy? [This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 01-11-2000).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Your crafting is visionary, be it fright or delight.  Claire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Toe, Your showing your soft spot again, But I thank you for that. You are a quick wit with a good sense of humor and I am not above a little joshing. I too read all your stuff but don't respond to all, but you are my anchor so don't let go and keep sending in. Your friend Sy Meadow, A wonderful comment and I thank you much. |
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