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First__Knight
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0 posted 2000-01-09 11:22 PM



Seconds within the Flower
~First Knight~

Alone in this world of mine,
My creation of where I live.
Where lonely is the norm,
And there's nothing left to give.

In the darkness of the night,
So rings the pain of empty.
Without the company of another,
Silence plays it's symphony.

Now running in my dream of dreams,
I'll never  know the wonder.
In the sharing of another's life,
Where did I start this blunder?

Born to lose this love I seek,
Things may never change.
Help me now my true sweet love,
Don't venture beyond my range.

A second in the fire's flame,
Seems like a completed hour.
A hour in your lover's arms,
But a second within the flower


 Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you"



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Denise
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1 posted 2000-01-09 11:46 PM


Beautiful, First Knight. You express well your pain and longing. Well done!

 Denise


cokey_95
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2 posted 2000-01-09 11:48 PM


Nice work..i luved it
hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 2000-01-10 09:57 AM


Sweet gentle knight, I hear your heartfelt cries
And yes, I know how lonely life can be
You've but to simply open up your eyes
And look into your heart and you'll see me
The world can be so dark, sometimes it seems
The sunlight often is a world away
But watch for me tonight there in your dreams
And night will turn into the light of day
Behind each cloud a silver lining lays
You need but wait the passing of the storm
For even on the darkest, coldest days
A spark is all it takes to keep you warm

And so I reach out to you in the dark
Just touch my hand and feel love's gentle spark



[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 01-10-2000).]

Pepper
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4 posted 2000-01-10 10:08 AM


Another beautiful piece FK.....

 A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire!
Shannon



Severn
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5 posted 2000-01-10 07:22 PM


FKnight - this is indeed lovely - and as delicate as a petal.

K

whiskey
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6 posted 2000-01-10 07:29 PM


First Knight, This is wonderful  
Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-01-10 07:52 PM


David -

Your writing just keeps getting better and better.  This is MARVELOUS ...
so sincere and even though a little sad ...
it's just BEAUTIFUL.
This one is a real winner !
~*Marge*~


First__Knight
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8 posted 2000-01-10 10:48 PM


Thank you Denise and Cokey

Ruth-Truly beautiful Sonnet..Always amazed at how your work refects so much beauty  

Thank you Pepper, Severn and Whiskey

Marge-What a compliment...Thank you so much

 Drive it like you stole it...LOL


Marge Tindal
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9 posted 2000-01-10 11:27 PM


Oh, David .....
'drive it like you stole it'
LOL !
Couldn't let that slide by without notice.

JamesMichael
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10 posted 2000-01-16 08:29 PM


I like this poem first knight..I enjoyed the way it slowly evolved into a romantic fantasy....or is it real?   james
Elizabeth Santos
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11 posted 2000-01-16 09:12 PM


The last verse to this poem is a lovely little poem unto itself
The whole was just beautiful
I really enjoyed it
Liz

Justbleu
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12 posted 2000-01-16 09:16 PM


I think I understood all too well!!  Well written!!  

Take Care
Bridgette


[This message has been edited by Justbleu (edited 01-16-2000).]

First__Knight
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13 posted 2000-01-16 10:35 PM


Thank you Marge....I thought it might bring a smile to someone

Thank you JMlee, Liz, and Justbleu


 Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe



Alwye
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14 posted 2000-01-17 12:08 PM


Oooh, so lovely, First Knight. "A hour in your lover's arms, But a second within the flower"..how very true this is.  A beautiful read.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha


Anne
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15 posted 2000-01-17 12:43 PM


Anything I could say has already been said, but I had to add in my vote--
"I'll second all of the above!"
Beautifully done!

Astraea
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16 posted 2000-01-17 12:46 PM


Very nicely put.  I could relate to this one [who can't with all the talent around here?] and it's very lovely.  Beautiful.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."



Eloise
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17 posted 2000-01-17 01:07 AM


This is so beautiful First Knight.  I really liked it. It flows so well.  
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