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Seconds within the Flower
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Seconds within the Flower |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678
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Seconds within the Flower ~First Knight~ Alone in this world of mine, My creation of where I live. Where lonely is the norm, And there's nothing left to give. In the darkness of the night, So rings the pain of empty. Without the company of another, Silence plays it's symphony. Now running in my dream of dreams, I'll never know the wonder. In the sharing of another's life, Where did I start this blunder? Born to lose this love I seek, Things may never change. Help me now my true sweet love, Don't venture beyond my range. A second in the fire's flame, Seems like a completed hour. A hour in your lover's arms, But a second within the flower Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you" |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, First Knight. You express well your pain and longing. Well done! Denise |
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cokey_95 Junior Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 35 |
Nice work..i luved it |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Sweet gentle knight, I hear your heartfelt cries And yes, I know how lonely life can be You've but to simply open up your eyes And look into your heart and you'll see me The world can be so dark, sometimes it seems The sunlight often is a world away But watch for me tonight there in your dreams And night will turn into the light of day Behind each cloud a silver lining lays You need but wait the passing of the storm For even on the darkest, coldest days A spark is all it takes to keep you warm And so I reach out to you in the dark Just touch my hand and feel love's gentle spark [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 01-10-2000).] |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Another beautiful piece FK..... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
FKnight - this is indeed lovely - and as delicate as a petal.  K |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
First Knight, This is wonderful |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
David - Your writing just keeps getting better and better. This is MARVELOUS ... so sincere and even though a little sad ... it's just BEAUTIFUL. This one is a real winner ! ~*Marge*~ |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Denise and Cokey Ruth-Truly beautiful Sonnet..Always amazed at how your work refects so much beauty Thank you Pepper, Severn and Whiskey Marge-What a compliment...Thank you so much Drive it like you stole it...LOL |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, David ..... 'drive it like you stole it' LOL ! Couldn't let that slide by without notice.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I like this poem first knight..I enjoyed the way it slowly evolved into a romantic fantasy....or is it real? james |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The last verse to this poem is a lovely little poem unto itself The whole was just beautiful I really enjoyed it Liz |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I think I understood all too well!! Well written!! Take Care Bridgette [This message has been edited by Justbleu (edited 01-16-2000).] |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Marge....I thought it might bring a smile to someone Thank you JMlee, Liz, and Justbleu Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Oooh, so lovely, First Knight. "A hour in your lover's arms, But a second within the flower"..how very true this is. A beautiful read. *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Anne Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 78 |
Anything I could say has already been said, but I had to add in my vote-- "I'll second all of the above!" Beautifully done! |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Very nicely put. I could relate to this one [who can't with all the talent around here?] and it's very lovely. Beautiful. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
This is so beautiful First Knight. I really liked it. It flows so well. |
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