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HM3 Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 169TX |
Laughter gives my soul ease, a brief welcome reprieve A gentle moment of peace, captured for a time The world keeps revolving, another thought comes to mind Tomorrow is not a promise, today has just begun Yesterday's are memories thoughts yet to come < !signature--> Work like money doesn't matter, love like you've never been hurt, dance like nobody's watching... [This message has been edited by HM3 (edited 01-09-2000).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
HM3, Nice, enjoyed the read. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
A title....how about 'Life'. Nice thoughts in this! Denise |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like the title Life! Because this poem sums it all up! Good one! How do you get your inspiration?  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
How about "Timeless Treasures"? enjoyed your poem |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
It may be cliché, but how about "Stolen Moments." Otherwise Lady D's "Life" gets my vote. A pleasant read all the same. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Two suggestions: 1) How about Laughter for a title? 2) I think the poem would be stronger without the last stanza... just a thought. Corinne |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I like this, it's simple, but says a great deal....and Life gets my vote too. |
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HM3 Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 169TX |
What about Circles for a title? |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
"Captured by the Moment" maybe? Michael |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
I like it. How about 'Circles Of Life'? ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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LyricFetish Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 528North Carolina |
I love your idea of "Circles" as it is, because I feel that a poem should speak for itself, and that the explanation should not be fully captured in the title. Good luck from a fellow poet. * Meredith * |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Short, sweet and to the point, great job! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I'd call it "Daylight Savings Time" for the double entendre, but that's just me. Mike |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is great short and to the point , Id call it "Life in time" Well done  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
HM3 I enjoyed this poem and I have some suggestions for a title. They are "A moment of time" and "More to come" and "In the moment" and "Living in the moment". I liked Andrews suggestion of "Stolen moments". James |
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