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Vaneet Randhawa New Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 5California |
Drunk Driver The flares on the road are bright red and I can see the accident just up ahead. A little boy, two or three and a girl, just seventeen; killed by a drunk man in a big blue car going at hight speeds, not realizing how he went this far. The kids are gone but the man survived and he must live, though he, too, has somewhat died. |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
What a heart wrenching picture Vaneet.  Welcome to Passions  |
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Femme's Father Member
since 1999-10-30
Posts 58Carrollton, TX, USA |
Sensitive and caring person you must be. A good rendition upon an often realistic scene. Its short, to the point and very good read... I like it..Yes, often in this life someone else has to pay a high price so someone else can gain a little understanding..God Understands james david |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Short and to the point , well done |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This gets a great deal said in very few words...well done!! |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Very well done. So short and yet it says so much. I have just posted a poem concerning the same topic "Drunken Tragedy". Nice to see that more people are concerned. Keep up the work The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions! This is a real heartbreaker. So sad because it is all too real.  Denise |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I wish the man who killed my daughter had died, he should have but he didn't. Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I must confess, in replying to this post, I am a bit at a loss for words. Such a sad poem...and sad that people can be irresponsible to the point of causing the death of others. Well done. Corinne |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Your poem, though disheartening, is definitely a success. It tumbles the reader into reflection. Perhaps in the reading, it will induce more of us to take up a stronger voice against such a tragic and deadly consequence. Thank you for sharing this one here.  Claire |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Welcome to Passions.....not greater loss felt than that of wasted act of another. Touching Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you" |
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