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DreamEvil
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0 posted 2000-01-07 05:20 PM


Ashen tongue
scalded by lies
reaches deep into the wellspring of belief
to drink down poisoning Truth
once again scalding the tongue
with blistering deceit
Every Truth of man was birthed in deception
down the line 'til Eve's conception
blossomed forth as raging fratricide
leading forward to fuel each future genocide
for Man's jealousy was born of the Serpent
and we are all sons
and daughters of Cain.
Adam's children mingled
with the seed of Cain
giving birth
to immortal pain
and doubtful self-worth
Our Dark forefather sleeps
beneath the facade we believe
tormenting conscience with Dreadful dreams
We can no more be Saints
than dead sinners can repent
of the pleasures they felt in far away life
for Lilith was the mother
that Cain took to wife
so incestuous progeny we be
created in innocence when Pride took Eve
and crucified her on the cross of blame
and naive Adam gave us his name
Even today we slaughter our brothers
in thousand-score masses
we live and breathe his legacy
and call unholy madness an act of the sane
for truly are we the Children of Cain.


©2000 DreamEvil


 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
-------------------------------------------------------
"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)



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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2000-01-07 05:28 PM


Soul-brother, this is excellent!!!!  Brilliantly written as always !!!   I enjoyed it much.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



Ohme
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2 posted 2000-01-07 05:29 PM


You are Able to convince me!!Interesting thought presented as poetry.
Severn
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3 posted 2000-01-07 06:43 PM


Dark one, these are strong words: We can no more be Saints
than dead sinners can repent

I like! Heavy, brooding work - it flows also, like a timeline - like generations.

K


 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath

Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap
4 posted 2000-01-07 07:07 PM


Wow -- scathing and raw -- I love this!

"created in innocence when pride took Eve
and crucified her on the cross of blame ..."

Excellent, my friend, excellent.  

--Kess

whiskey
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5 posted 2000-01-07 07:12 PM


This is great , I agree with the Sujbect I too think this, Well done  
Andrew Scott
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6 posted 2000-01-07 07:12 PM


I guess it is a testment to the quality of your work that after having read so many I am still surprised by the depth and strength of your words.  Thank you for sharing your talent and self.
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
7 posted 2000-01-07 07:16 PM


Well, I've always said you are an excellent poet..but there was something about this that made me feel uncomfortable (what you were aiming for I think)..it seems hard edged..and for me, was difficult to read.. the flow wasn't there....(but it's good..just not my style!)  

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
8 posted 2000-01-07 08:52 PM


DE,
You write like one possessed
Excellent portrayal of a mess.

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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Glen Hope, PA USA
9 posted 2000-01-07 09:17 PM


This is an extreamly powerful piece Scott. You speak volumes in this one. Well done  
Marilyn
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10 posted 2000-01-07 10:08 PM


This is a very powerful piece Scott. We need to realize that we are ALL human. Being human we all make mistakes and we are all intitled to our feelings. When we do not agree with another does not mean that either is in the wrong, just on the other side and unable to understand our point of view.


Alwye
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In the space between moments
11 posted 2000-01-07 10:49 PM


Brilliant, my friend.  This one did indeed cut very deep.

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha



Tara Simms
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12 posted 2000-01-08 01:09 AM


Extremely dark and chilling!  The ending lines makes my blood run cold.  Great writing.
JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
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Northwestern, NJ.
13 posted 2000-01-08 08:20 AM


Excellent Dear Poet
Full of so many different meanings for me!
Well Done!!!!

Jenny Lee


 Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born.

L. Pirandello
16th Century Dramatist


Nate Dogg
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Georgia, Fulton
14 posted 2000-01-08 12:58 PM


Well done Cain! Very dark too!

 Nathan

DreamEvil
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15 posted 2000-01-09 05:06 AM


I believe mankind to be children of Cain as much as children of God. Therein lies the reason for our depth of feeling.

 Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~.
DreamEvil©
-------------------------------------------------------
"Either kill me or take me as I am,
because I'll be damned if I ever change..."

Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade
(Marquis de Sade)



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