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The Children of Cain
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The Children of Cain |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Ashen tongue scalded by lies reaches deep into the wellspring of belief to drink down poisoning Truth once again scalding the tongue with blistering deceit Every Truth of man was birthed in deception down the line 'til Eve's conception blossomed forth as raging fratricide leading forward to fuel each future genocide for Man's jealousy was born of the Serpent and we are all sons and daughters of Cain. Adam's children mingled with the seed of Cain giving birth to immortal pain and doubtful self-worth Our Dark forefather sleeps beneath the facade we believe tormenting conscience with Dreadful dreams We can no more be Saints than dead sinners can repent of the pleasures they felt in far away life for Lilith was the mother that Cain took to wife so incestuous progeny we be created in innocence when Pride took Eve and crucified her on the cross of blame and naive Adam gave us his name Even today we slaughter our brothers in thousand-score masses we live and breathe his legacy and call unholy madness an act of the sane for truly are we the Children of Cain. ©2000 DreamEvil Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Soul-brother, this is excellent!!!! Brilliantly written as always !!!  I enjoyed it much. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Ohme Senior Member
since 1999-07-17
Posts 816Texas |
You are Able to convince me!!Interesting thought presented as poetry. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Dark one, these are strong words: We can no more be Saints than dead sinners can repent I like! Heavy, brooding work - it flows also, like a timeline - like generations. K'...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Wow -- scathing and raw -- I love this! "created in innocence when pride took Eve and crucified her on the cross of blame ..." Excellent, my friend, excellent. --Kess |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is great , I agree with the Sujbect I too think this, Well done |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
I guess it is a testment to the quality of your work that after having read so many I am still surprised by the depth and strength of your words. Thank you for sharing your talent and self. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Well, I've always said you are an excellent poet..but there was something about this that made me feel uncomfortable (what you were aiming for I think)..it seems hard edged..and for me, was difficult to read.. the flow wasn't there....(but it's good..just not my style!)  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DE, You write like one possessed Excellent portrayal of a mess. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is an extreamly powerful piece Scott. You speak volumes in this one. Well done |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This is a very powerful piece Scott. We need to realize that we are ALL human. Being human we all make mistakes and we are all intitled to our feelings. When we do not agree with another does not mean that either is in the wrong, just on the other side and unable to understand our point of view. |
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Alwye
Moderator
Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Brilliant, my friend. This one did indeed cut very deep. *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Extremely dark and chilling! The ending lines makes my blood run cold. Great writing. |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Excellent Dear Poet Full of so many different meanings for me! Well Done!!!! Jenny Lee Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born. L. Pirandello 16th Century Dramatist |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Well done Cain! Very dark too! Nathan |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
I believe mankind to be children of Cain as much as children of God. Therein lies the reason for our depth of feeling. Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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