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neitham Junior Member
since 1999-12-29
Posts 42India |
FOOLS PARADISE dreaming of a vision in a world of illusion enclosed in a sanctuary chained and encumbered in the doldrums, persecuted dawn of a disillusionment in the cold night, empty words contemplate not this fate stone cold, frozen eye search this damn soul drowning in poisoned tears footsteps in the dark whispered temptation of chimerical mirth the devils incarnation clothed in a white robe. victim of a twisted fate scouting the impossible running round in circles waits for the falling stars defy all rationality shed every inhibitions hiding behind vain hopes this is fools paradise. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Excellent! Neitham - this is a very good piece of poetry - I really felt the heaviness and sense of hopelessness - particularly in the last verse. Well done.  '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
Wow! I guess you made your point. I nearly started to get pulled into a hopeless feeling before the Spirit yanked me back. Well done! "God's love is hope which satisfies" Paul |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Neithem this is great really good piece well done |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I am quickly becoming a fan of your writings |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I agree with hoot! Love your style, you reach out and grab the reader! My favorite line: "whispered temptation of chimerical mirth" - whoa! Corinne |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I agree! Your words do reach out and grab the reader! Denise |
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