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Open Poetry #5

Life (a poem by my son)

Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2000-01-06 04:39 PM

Note: this was my son's Christmas present to me, knowing how much I love poetry! Sweet kid, huh?

Life

A golden, wild happy feeling in life
You have to go from the bottom,
To the top of the ceiling.

The water is taken from a creek
That supports lives in a weary peek at the future.
It is a battle to stay alive, you might have to take a peek at a beehive.

One day a deer came up to me, but after a few seconds it decided to flee.
That is how animals react, I hope you can pay attention to that.

1999 Jonathon (age 8, unedited)

[This message has been edited by Corinne (edited 01-06-2000).]

LngJhnAg
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since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

1 posted 2000-01-06 04:43 PM

Wow, Corinne - he's a chip off the old block. His style shows us all the life you gave him. I guess some people do live forever, don't they?

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-01-06 05:59 PM

How sweet, Corinne! Another poet in the wings!

Denise

Deborah
Junior Member

since 2000-01-03

Posts 41

3 posted 2000-01-06 06:32 PM

What a cute poem and special present to get. It's nice to know there are some young poets out there.
Deborah

Corinne
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

4 posted 2000-01-06 07:31 PM

Thanks Michael, Denise and Deborah! Best present I ever got!

Corinne

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