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Country Cookin' |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL 
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Country Cookin’ The screen door slammed shut Not near fast enough To keep out July or the flies And sieved the humidity Through the wire mesh- A free flow exchange of gulf moisture Mingling with aromas of Charlie’s cooking. It didn’t close sufficiently tight To keep Charlie’s mind confined To the griddle or the fry pots- The wood framed keeper couldn’t Screen out the passion that resided in him. To wander behind a bull tongue plow in fresh air Instead of this grease mist That coated his senses until the whole world Smelled exactly like French-fries. The café owned him in a cruel way Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, Robert! That door can never close sufficiently enough to keep out our hopes and dreams! While we dream there is still hope!  (optimist's take)Poor Charlie, stuck in that darn kitchen smellin' like grease, all hot and sweaty, a nowhere job, robbing him of his dreams. (pessimist's take). Either way, great poem, Robert!  Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RobertB, Been there done that,enjoyed the poem. |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Thanks guys....(you are one of the guys to me Denise!) I think we all have been "there". Ya know?? if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Oh this was great Robert! It is also good to see you...*giggle*. I have not been in open often enough. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Hey great one Robert! I see you have returned, or was it me? Added your picture too, but where's the Harley? miss ya! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Thanks Mar and 'Becca!! I took a few days off and relaxed! How are you guys???? See ya on ICQ!! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Yep....a diner's dilemma....Well done Robert.....almost felt like I was in a Waffle house somewhere in Arkansas..... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This reminded me of a job I once had... what one will do to pay college tuition! LOL. The body may be trapped in boredom... but the mind is free to soar. Great job, Robert! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice imagery Robert...BTW....who is that nice looking man  |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This one had me remembering some years back when my first job was at good ole' Burger King !!(stop laughing you guys!)Good poem Robert!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Burger King??? Remember Burger Chef??? LOL my first "real" job. I am glad this poem brought back memories. That is a compliment! Ruth......ummmm the nice looking man?? Where?????  }Robert |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
February 13, 1981 ~ wreaked the car... February 17, 1981 ~ got real first job... Bakers Better Burgers and Tacos of Sunnymead California. Worked the grill. I think every kid should work fast food so they know what they don't want to do for the rest of their lives. Sir Robert... always a good read and I do like your style. Slick pic' there too. Lookin' like you's the MAN! |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Love this poem, Robert It has ambience, it does.I once worked at a little place called The Golden Drumstick~~Fried chicken, hamburgers (NOT the frozen ones!) and onion rings...and lots of grease! LOL Had to wash my hair with Spic N Span to get it out!  It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Thanks!!! All the comments have me laughing!! I wish that this poem had gone on and on about Charlie. In my mind I had him starting at the diner at 16 during the depression when his folks lost there farm. I envisioned him working for Old Man Gilmore then "inheriting" the diner after the Old Man passed away. All the while hating the diner because of what he lost...yet loving the it for what it saved him from. Oh well.....maybe someday I will tackle all these thoughts for this poem........ Robert |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I agree...I wish it would have gone on and on about him too. Have you considered perhaps a short story? Or poem/novella? It's an intriguing glimpse...leaves the reader ready for the story.  Claire |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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