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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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I saw you laughing in a photograph, It was faded and worn, But it seemed like yesterday. We were sitting on the stadium rail, Our jeans were torn, And it was a cool fall day. And we were smiling then, You know you always say cheese, When the camera’s around. And we had big dreams then, We were eager to please, We were young and proud. But, there aren’t any camera’s here today. Family pictures up and down the hall, You know my daughter Looks a lot like her great grandma. There’s the grandpa that I never knew, I always wondered, How he felt when he escaped the law. And they were smiling then, You know they always dressed up, When the camera was around. And they had big dreams then, But they never guessed where, All their children were bound. But, there aren’t any camera’s here today. I saw a picture of mom, You know she would’ve wanted to see, This one of us at the prom. You were wearing that peach colored dress, And I had on that tux, With a ruffled shirt and vest. I’ll bet she was smiling then, Any time something big was goin on, She had the camera around. She must’ve had big dreams then, But, we had to move on And… I hope you two are getting along…. And maybe there’s camera’s there today. How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius |
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Coegwyr Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
A well written piece Mr. Rebel full of feeling. Well done. Craig Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very nostalgic. A bit sad, yet wonderful. I enjoyed this very much. Denise |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
...don't know what happened again! Sorry!< !signature--> Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-03-2000).] |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
I liked this one a lot. It has a sort of haunting, secret undertone that I think is appealing. Nice work |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Local, You write well, good paint, enjoyed the read. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
These words cause my heart to pound in recollection...I would also like to think there are cameras. of a sort, there. You've written this beautifully.  Claire |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thanks very much to all. I originally wrote this one as a song long ago, but, truthfully never liked it very much. It seems to work better as poetry but it's still a tad bit out of my style. Thanks all again. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Out of your style it may be but the emotion makes it. Good thoughts. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
A very unique introspective. It's amazing the power a photograph can hold...and the way they can link us to to different times, and different people. I'm glad you dug this one out, it's truly a fine work. Michael |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very full of emotions...well written  |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
very very nice rebel....loveit when you reflect and share |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
LR - I do believe I enjoy your work, whether it be in or out of style.... Keep 'em coming, my friend...  |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
What gems one finds when venturing into the back pages  I'm trying to catch up on all I've missed (an impossible task, I know) but I'm glad to have found this one. LR...this is great. Bravo It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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