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Redneck Romance |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA 
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Redneck Romance Forget sweeping you across a ballroom floor, Donned in your elegant best, Waltzing to an orchestra Or a string quartet. He’ll swing me around the putt putt course, And dip me on the fairway Wearing overalls, old tshirt And shoes that’ve seen better days. There won’t be bouquets of flowers But there’s a picture from a booth, A spontaneous, public kiss, We almost chipped a tooth! Forget a horse drawn carriage, We raced arcade horses around a track, Then flew around the speedway In go-carts, mine was black. We didn’t hike through a rain forest, Just a local state park, Whiling away the daylight, Lingering til dark. We didn’t dine on caviar and wine Bathed in candlelight We munched on summer sausage Under golden moonlight. There was no brilliant backdrop Of glittering city lights. Just stars as far as the eye could see Precious jewels on black of night. No furs to ward off evening’s chill, Just the touch of his skin The feel of his hand on mine Lit fires deep within. No romantic ballad’s serenaded From below the balcony But he sang his heart out In a crowded restaurant just for me. We wandered through several waterfalls And held each other perched atop Holding and loving passionately While the world came to a stop. No interruptions, phones, or pagers To break the silence in the air. Just the sound of two hearts beating And finding love in this pair. I have a beautiful reminder, Glow in the dark beads with a star, Hanging where I’ll always see, From the mirror of my beat up car. So take your upscale gentlemen, With suits and fancy cars. I’ll take my redneck any day, For he gave me the stars. It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I personally think putt putt is a pretty sophisticated evening out... anyway.... enjoyed the poem.... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Oh, Tara, this is beautiful! Especially the last line! Denise |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Tara, fancy or simple it's all in the eyes of the beholder. Very well written piece. Enjoyed this very much  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
dipped you in the fairway and shared a sausage with you???? My kinda guy!!!! Great poem, Tara. I can offer everything he can.....and less! |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Ah, Balladeer, trying to schmooze your way into my heart! |
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destiny502 Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 57OH |
cute poem! i think i am gonna have to show my boyfriend this one! |
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Julie Jordan Scott Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146Bakersfield, CA USA |
If it was anyone but you girlfriend I would be GREEN with envy! But since its YOU I am nothing but thrilled!!! Love this, too funny! I am a Life Purpose Coach who specializes in assisting men and women to clarify their Life Purpose and then in turn live true to their purpose. After 5 years working with the Severely Mentally Ill in County Mental Health, I gave up the bureaucracy (and safe, secure blanket) of this environment to pursue my own purpose and passion. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is cute Tara, love it |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Tara, Impressed with your poem and paint. It was to me a little quaint. But it was indeed, Enjoyable to read. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Enjoyed this Tara, sounds like a good time to me. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
LOLLOL No comment Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Tara: Wonderful and sounds superb to me.. HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Out yonder in the front yard, Next to Ma's old washer, That's where I put my knee down, And asked for her hand ferever. With a backdrop of old Chevys And weeds up to our waists, I was breathin' heavy, As I looked into her face. The ring was very shiney, Came off my heater hose, Not one of them cheap plastic ones, But shiney stainless chrome! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ahhhhhh... down home romancin'! *G* Loved the poem... and Toe's response... givin' your love the very best! Yee-HA! *G* |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
LOL..Both the poem and Toe's response got me laughin'. I agree girlfriend,sure don't need elegant bests and ballroom floors to win my love..But must admit that I like 'em a wee bit nonetheless..Teehee. Nice one.. |
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J.B.SR Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 29Seattle area |
Nice to see that some still enjoy the simple things in life. Very nice |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Thank you all for the responses. Toerag, you sure know how to capture a girl's heart! It matters not how strait the gate; How charged with punishments the scroll; I am the master of my fate: I am the captain of my soul. --W.E. Henley |
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Deborah Junior Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 41 |
Well, you've just described the relationship I have with my redneck, and much better than I can. Great poem! Deborah |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Deborah, isn't it great the way they do those sweet little things that just sweep us off our feet? |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
I see I ain't the only one That got swept off my feet And took a ride with a redneck In his 4X4 truck with no seat! He gave me the sweetest smile And added the cutest wink Thank goodness we was in a truck Cause Lord that boy did stink! But deep within that backwoods hick I found the man of my dreams Who cares if you could see his butt Cause his pants have worn out seams! Bringing back some memories with this one Girlfriend! |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
AH-HA! That is so cute-LOVED IT! |
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