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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Weeping rose forced to grow you take no comfort in your beauty held back by trellis and twine pruned by the greedy need of a selfish man though your thorns prick his flesh and make him bleed still he does not relent in cutting you down to fit his designs yet through this all remember your fragrance is sweet and you delight the eye of every passerby though your value is lost and outer beauty obscures duty Weeping rose run wild with delight for yours is the season and your beauty the reason men seek deep inside and try in vain to hide their longing for you to adorn their side Therein lies your pride. ©2000 DreamEvil Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Beautiful analogy written in here as well as the image of a true rose my friend! Well done, good job and all the others!  |
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Julie Jordan Scott Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 146Bakersfield, CA USA |
Scott, this one cut into my flesh like a knife....it felt as if you had cut through my exterior and peered inside. I wonder how many women are prisoners to this same experience? I suppose the challenge, then, is for us to make the choice to run wild with delight....thank you for reminding me that indeed, I can. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Only you, my friend, could come up with an analogy like this. A rose, shaped by the will of another -- "trellis and twine" --brilliant! And the thorns pricking ... trying to resist ... WOW! There isn't enough space for all the things I can read into this. So I will just say "well done." --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Scott...this is lovely. It holds so true. Absolutely beautiful, one of your best pieces I have yet to see. APPLAUDS!!! Thank you for the read my friend |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is really beautiful Soul-Brother!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I admire your poetic insight with this piece...its tone of sadness and beauty is lovely. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
DE, One of your best, but then I only expect the best from you. Sy |
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Terrina Kethryveris Member
since 1999-12-06
Posts 53USA |
A rose is most beautiful when left wild to grow. 'Tis ashame that most don't realize that in the case of flower or human. Wonderful poem my friend. Terri Truth be known, fantasy is much more appealing than reality. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is so well written and a truly beautiful piece Liz |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
A beautiful poem, sad in it's ways, but the ending was great! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
One word... Magnificent Well, ok...brilliant, divine, and insightful, too Bravo, dear!It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
As beautiful as a wild rose! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
A beautiful poem! In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
Thought-provoking, Dream...another success. |
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thursdayschild Member
since 1999-07-01
Posts 169Houston, Tx. |
astounding perception coupled with your poetic ability...a stunning creation. (as always) Thank you for sharing. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
'Twas inspired (yes I said inspired ) by the plight of a friend dear to me. I am grateful for the replies but saddened that so many identify with this piece.Thank you much, the recognition of peers is a prize indeed. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow. This one has thorns all of its own - I like. Well done, Scott. K...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
I agree with what Skyfyre and Julie said....I too, have felt prisoner to the idea you share here....fabulous analogy indeed! This is definately one of your most brilliantly thought out poems yet....I applaude your understanding. ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000! |
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JennyLee Senior Member
since 1999-09-01
Posts 1461Northwestern, NJ. |
Though your value is lost And outer beauty obscures duty Weeping Rose run wild with delight. One of your best You know how much the rose means to me Excellent analogies all through this one! Jenny Words bloom like flowers that seem astonished at being born. L. Pirandello 16th Century Dramatist |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Very lovely, indeed. Parker |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Dream....I do so enjoy your imagary....I love roses myself....I loved the analogy!! Thank You!! Take Care Bridgette |
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catslair Junior Member
since 2000-01-16
Posts 48 |
lovely scott........but i also think it talks about the strenght of the natural forces of life.....i really enjoyed it ....thankyou |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
SPell bound in its beauty Dream.....One of your best I have read....if not the best. Drive it like you stole it...LOL And another thing...When I rev my engine I want people to think the world is coming to a end....hehehe |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Scott, this is exquisite!! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I don't know how I could overlook such beautiful poetry, well I guess I didn't after all The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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TexUS Member
since 2003-03-20
Posts 228 |
Truly exceptional-an amazing piece of art. |
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