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The Silent Spring |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
In child's night, no angel's wing, Skin to skin, hate's piercing sting, From forth the darkness, evil leapt, Within boy's soul, a poet slept. Saltless tears in flowless spring, Will the song bird ever sing? Within child's heart, pain's anguish crept, While in his soul, a poet slept. Evermore the night does bring, Screams of pain, ever wailing, Within his heart, a young boy wept, While in man's soul, a poet slept. [This message has been edited by Mike (edited 12-26-1999).] |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very sad, Mike, but well written. Roses thorns |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
So sad. Perhaps the poet will awaken in time...sometimes pain can be the catalyst. Well done, Mike. Denise |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Good poem, I have my own thoughts as to the meaning, but would rather have the author's interpretation. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mike, Excellent poem. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Then there is a full well for this poet to write about, and now his spirit can sing This is very well written Liz |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is not merely good. This is magnificent! I love it! So much is said here...it explains certain people so clearly! Thank you for writing this!  [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (edited 12-26-1999).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This brought goosebumps Mike...what a sad, but wonderful poem  |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
'Tis a magnificently sad set of verse indeed, my compliments to you. Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You never, ever, ever, ever, ever, disappoint me, my friend..... This is splendid!! |
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neokano New Member
since 1999-12-22
Posts 5 |
The only thing I could say after reading this poem was "wow". Thank you for your writing |
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neokano New Member
since 1999-12-22
Posts 5 |
All I could say after reading this poem was "wow". Thank you for you writing. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
This is great Mike! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Thank you all very much for you comments. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Excellent indeed Mike!! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
DEEP! DEEP! DEEP! DEEP! DEEP! |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Within the man, the child did hide Amidst the past, interred inside -- A watch of nightmares nightly kept While in his soul, a poet slept ... In corners cloistered, mute and grim As restless shadows taunted him; He might have lost his mind, except He knew that there, the poet slept ... Too tired to cry, too weak to scream, He prayed for strength to end this dream -- And then, a flood within him broke: And armed with verse, the poet woke! Just my little version of a happy ending. I enjoyed this very much; it tugged at my heartstrings mercilessly (this is a good thing). The refrain was especially effective -- but I just couldn't stand to leave him sleeping! LOL --Kess You cannot choose the way of your death, but the path you choose will determine its own end. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful work here Mike. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
A good poem,mike!!!!!! |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Excellent!!! Really liked the last two lines. Really love your work. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Rus Bowden Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139 |
Hi Mike, Love the darkness of this and your haunting rhyme scheme. Excellent, creative read from the dark side. Rus |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Achingly lovely, and also, good rhythm, flows very well! Corinne |
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