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Ravenz23 New Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 7 |
Have i ever told you.. that if I sit really still and silent, sometimes..i like to think.. i can hear your heart beating.. in time with mine? Have I ever told you... that when I watch you speak to me.. through lines and cords, and bytes and ram, I imagine... your voice, whispering into my ear? Have I ever told you... that I wait out each day in anticipation.. wanting, only an hour or two.. just a second in space and time, to feel close to you? Have I ever told you.. that there has been times, when I ached for you.. ached for you so badly, that the emotions overwhelmed me.. and so I sat and cried? Have I ever told you.. that sometimes, I will reach out touching your name.. on this cold screen before me, wishing.. I could reach in and pull you to me? Have I ever told you.. that after the first time I ever heard the sound of your voice.. thousands of miles away.. I sat up all night, turning the conversation over and over in my mind, examining it, like some newly discovered species of flower? Have I ever told you.. that I would give everything up, just for one night.. to be able to lay near you.. to feel your chest rise and fall with each breath you take, just to know that you are real? Have I ever told you.. that I dream of you often.. I dream of you reaching out and touching my hand.. simply to let me know that you are there, and everything is okay? Have I ever told you.. ohh my sweet baby, have I still yet to tell you... that I love you? [This message has been edited by Ravenz23 (edited 02-03-2000).] |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Lovely... As I happen to love some of my cyber friends very much, possibly beyond normal, this is very touching... Beautiful poem, I like it. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Ravenz! Wonderfully romantic poem! Please check your email for a special welcome! Denise |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is wonderful writing....and the thoughts are very haunting. Welcome to our home. |
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Ravenz23 New Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 7 |
thank you for the welcomes! I had made a little mistake there, and the title was supposed to be: Have I ever... somehow i messed up and the title ended up in the middle of the poem, also forgot to space between the paragraphs..but thank you so much for the feedback! [This message has been edited by Ravenz23 (edited 02-03-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ravenz, if there is anything you'd like to change in this, simply select the edit funtion (that icon with the paper and pencil on top of your poem)and then just go in and change anything you'd like! Denise |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Have I ever told you it sounds like you've got to be totally in love with a fantasy. (laugh) Sorry about that...honestly I don't know anything about this subject...except I am totally and madly in love with an internet friend myself who's name I will not mention. This was delightful to read. James |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
This is beautiful, and if you enver told this person, I think you should =) Oh and of course, welcome to passions! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This poem was full of wanting...wish you the best...and welcome to passions!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Been there done that...it's a wonderful feeling!! I was lucky...we finally met!! Anywayz, that's another story!! I liked this a lot!! Welcome to Passions!! Bridgette Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." |
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Koon Junior Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 43Singapore |
Wow! This poem is so beautifully crafted!! Great entry! Keep up the good work! Koon- |
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