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Empty Pockets |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Empty PocketsYou dismiss my bare feet as mere whimsy, a pleasure for which you've no time, though what pleasure you found in their soft, supple skin when truer treasures were not so confined. You've just summoned the clerk from your office for a deadline, an editor's call yet you've time to stop talking and watch me as I empty my pockets in the hall. As you stand here before me in earnest and I, before you, sadder still, to have measured the dose of disdain from your eyes to have swallowed dismissal's hard pill. You're staring, quite curious, at treasures found all through my stroll on the grounds, the bits and the baubles of nature's intrigue smooth stones, velvet leaves that I've found. To yourself you propose you don't know me. To my eyes your expression bares truth, and I wonder how someone can manage to walk with empty pockets so laden with proof.  Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Hi Claire! Nice to see you finally! Lovely picture! This poem reminded me of my granddaugher and her little treasure collecting escapades! She must have given us every stone and seashell ever seen! We have these treasures lined up on the kitchen window sill. I enjoy them daily. It's too bad for the people who can't find joy in lifes little treasures like these! Denise |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Proof is in the understanding. This is so laid with such. Love how you cause your words to flow in this. So well written I used to be schizophrenic, but we're ok now so don't make me mad cause I'm running out of places to hide the bodies......LOL |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You come up with such intreguing subject matter. How your mind does work!, and then spins a verse as lovely as this. Liz |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Beautiful and thought provoking. I enjoyed this very much. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, Claire- How lovely this is. 'Empty Pockets' not empty at all. This is full of love. Life's little treasures in little-boy measure fill the pockets of my memories. Well, I just think this is wonderful ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
The last line really cinched this one with a hollow note ... congratulations Claire, you've done it again.  Brilliant! --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Denise...I'm glad it reminded you of something as sweet as your grand daughter and her treasure hunts. Yes, I do feel sad for those who haven't the capacity to enjoy life's realest of treasures. First Knight...thank you for letting me know you enjoyed this piece. Yes, the proof is certainly in the understanding. Liz...thank you, I'm glad you liked this, though it was written from personal experience more than imagination, and happened just as I have set it down here. Interesting how little things like pockets can tell so much about a person, isn't it? Septsong...so glad you enjoyed. Marge...thank you, and I love your little verse there! Skyfyre...thanks. I always appreciate and respect your commentary! Claire |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"Empty pockets laden with proof..." That works beautifully....  |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Hi Claire....it is nice to see you!!! I enjoyed your poem....well done. Robert |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Hi Claire....it is nice to see you!!! I enjoyed your poem....well done. Robert |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Nan...thank you for reading. It's a bit different for me, but thought I'd post it. Robert...hello, hello I'm glad you enjoyed. Thank you!Claire |
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