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Once Upon A Dream
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 4

0 posted 2000-01-30 10:11 PM

A love kept within
With nowhere to go
Has discovered a place
And declared it its home

An untapped spring
Resembles this love
Flowing in secret
As free as a dove

Nobody compares
Such a beautiful soul
Your eyes like diamonds
Your heart like gold

Never have my lips
Felt a touch as true
So completely lost
Am I, in you

I was swept away
At my first sight
You were like an angel
Shrouded in light

An assurance was made
We sealed it with a kiss
My adoration remains unyielding
I promise you this

OnceUponADream

SEA

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since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2000-01-30 10:16 PM

Once Upon A Dream....... this reminds me of my wedding day. So very romantic.....Welcome to Passions! Great way to start, I'll be looking for more from you!

-SEA

Poet deVine

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since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

2 posted 2000-01-30 10:19 PM

Welcome to Passions! I think this is a wonderful, loving poem!

Alwye

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since 1999-06-16

Posts 3850
In the space between moments

3 posted 2000-01-30 10:22 PM

Yes, welcome! This is incredibly beautiful..you have a lot of talent!

*Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha

jaxjoy
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since 1999-12-14

Posts 112
Texas

4 posted 2000-01-30 10:33 PM

Beautiful and heartfelt..I enjoyed this very much

Lynn
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since 1999-09-20

Posts 316
Jasper, Alabama U.S.A.

5 posted 2000-01-30 10:41 PM

Welcome to Passions....Great intrance...I really like the poem.

If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

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6 posted 2000-01-30 11:14 PM

Welcome to Passions, Once Upon A Dream! Beautiful poem! Simply beautiful! Please check your email for a special welcome!

Denise

mariee66
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 596
Recess, OfYourMind

7 posted 2000-01-31 12:04 PM

WOW~

That cetainly was dreamy~

You have quite a talent~

Marie~

The Haunted Poet
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since 2000-01-24

Posts 37
Sumner Washington

8 posted 2000-01-31 12:09 PM

Excellent Poem!!! I really liked it! Welcome and keep at it!

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

9 posted 2000-01-31 12:34 PM

Once-
This is a very pretty poem.
Reading it in a whisper worked for me.
I like it ~
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~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 01-31-2000).]

One Who Understands
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since 2000-01-20

Posts 251
Cedar Rapids, Iowa

10 posted 2000-01-31 12:59 PM

God thats beautiful. It makes me wish I were a girl

Welcome, I can't wait to hear from you again. You write very well

Once Upon A Dream
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 4

11 posted 2000-01-31 08:02 PM

One time before I was a member of this wonderful forum. I went under the name of 'Keeper of the Keys', if any of you remember. I have to admit that I never got as many replies to my writings then as I did on this very first one today. Thank you all so incredibly much. I love you all!

God, grant me the serenity to accept the things I can not change, the courage to change the things I can, and the wisdom to know the difference.

~~~OnceUponADream~~~

tulip
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since 1999-07-04

Posts 320
unknown

12 posted 2000-01-31 08:24 PM

This was very beautiful. The other person is very lucky!!!

Gene
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since 2000-01-23

Posts 935
Colorado, USA

13 posted 2000-01-31 09:52 PM

Beautiful poem.

Execllent way to start off. I like how your name fits so well with the poem--they're almost inseparable.

Welcome, Once (or twice--hopefully many more visits), to the forums.

~Gene

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

14 posted 2000-02-01 08:55 AM

I must have really liked this...I replied twice

....oops

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 02-01-2000).]

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

15 posted 2000-02-01 09:02 AM

This is beautifully romantic...welcome to passions once more.
I'd only make to very small changes in the first and third stanza to just perfect the rhyme...I was going to e-mail them to you, but since you've no e-mail listed...Just a suggestion here:

A love kept within
(With nowhere to roam)
Has discovered a place
And declared it its home

Nobody compares
(Such a beauty to hold)
Your eyes like diamonds
Your heart like gold

Koon
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since 2000-01-27

Posts 43
Singapore

16 posted 2000-02-01 09:27 AM

Beautiful entry! I like it a lot!

Koon-

Once Upon A Dream
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since 2000-01-30

Posts 4

17 posted 2000-02-01 07:41 PM

thank you for the wonderful suggestions owl! thank you all so much

God, grant me the serenity to accept the things I can not change, the courage to change the things I can, and the wisdom to know the difference.

~~~OnceUponADream~~~

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