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Once Upon A Dream New Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 4 |
A love kept within With nowhere to go Has discovered a place And declared it its home An untapped spring Resembles this love Flowing in secret As free as a dove Nobody compares Such a beautiful soul Your eyes like diamonds Your heart like gold Never have my lips Felt a touch as true So completely lost Am I, in you I was swept away At my first sight You were like an angel Shrouded in light An assurance was made We sealed it with a kiss My adoration remains unyielding I promise you this OnceUponADream |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Once Upon A Dream....... this reminds me of my wedding day. So very romantic.....Welcome to Passions! Great way to start, I'll be looking for more from you!  -SEA |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to Passions! I think this is a wonderful, loving poem! |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Yes, welcome! This is incredibly beautiful..you have a lot of talent!  *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
Beautiful and heartfelt..I enjoyed this very much |
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Lynn Member
since 1999-09-20
Posts 316Jasper, Alabama U.S.A. |
Welcome to Passions....Great intrance...I really like the poem. If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Once Upon A Dream! Beautiful poem! Simply beautiful! Please check your email for a special welcome! Denise |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
WOW~ That cetainly was dreamy~ You have quite a talent~ Marie~ |
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The Haunted Poet Junior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 37Sumner Washington |
Excellent Poem!!! I really liked it! Welcome and keep at it! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Once- This is a very pretty poem. Reading it in a whisper worked for me. I like it ~ < !signature--> ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 01-31-2000).] |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
God thats beautiful. It makes me wish I were a girl Welcome, I can't wait to hear from you again. You write very well |
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Once Upon A Dream New Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 4 |
One time before I was a member of this wonderful forum. I went under the name of 'Keeper of the Keys', if any of you remember. I have to admit that I never got as many replies to my writings then as I did on this very first one today. Thank you all so incredibly much. I love you all! God, grant me the serenity to accept the things I can not change, the courage to change the things I can, and the wisdom to know the difference. ~~~OnceUponADream~~~ |
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tulip Member
since 1999-07-04
Posts 320unknown |
This was very beautiful. The other person is very lucky!!! |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Beautiful poem. Execllent way to start off. I like how your name fits so well with the poem--they're almost inseparable.Welcome, Once (or twice--hopefully many more visits), to the forums.  ~Gene |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I must have really liked this...I replied twice ....oops[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 02-01-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is beautifully romantic...welcome to passions once more. I'd only make to very small changes in the first and third stanza to just perfect the rhyme...I was going to e-mail them to you, but since you've no e-mail listed...Just a suggestion here: A love kept within (With nowhere to roam) Has discovered a place And declared it its home Nobody compares (Such a beauty to hold) Your eyes like diamonds Your heart like gold |
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Koon Junior Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 43Singapore |
Beautiful entry! I like it a lot! Koon- |
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Once Upon A Dream New Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 4 |
thank you for the wonderful suggestions owl! thank you all so much God, grant me the serenity to accept the things I can not change, the courage to change the things I can, and the wisdom to know the difference. ~~~OnceUponADream~~~ |
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