Open Poetry #5 |
When Next ....... |
Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
WHEN NEXT..... When next can I have your strong arms around me And feel the touch of your soft hands over my body When next can I taste again the sweetness of your tender kisses And see your smile and look for the lust in your deep brown eyes When next can I hear your sexy voice whisper sweet nothings in my ear When Let it be soon I want you..... |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Well...I don't have a sexy voice, but I know how to say a lot of nothing! Heck, I do it all the time in every poem I write (except for when I'm welcoming people--that's different)...lol Great piece! Little Spyro T. Dragon |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Ah, I know that feeling well... tender, yearning poem. ...Living is ever like crossing rivers; finding a new life on each shore ... RJG |
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kaleidoscope Junior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 38 |
Soft, sad, aching poem. I like it a lot. |
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simplyYRREHS Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 162 |
I agree with Kaleidoscope on the "aching" thing...expressed the want perfectly. Good job! |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Woohoo, I have brown eyes. Very nice--short, but sweet. ~Gene |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful Roniece! So romantic and full of yearning!! Denise |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Yes, the longing in this is palpable... Very nice piece Roniece... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Roniece, this is beautiful.... |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Roniece, I say that to my husband every day! I miss him when he is away from me. I loved your poem! -SEA |
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