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fc
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0 posted 2000-01-28 10:07 AM



sitting there
in her chair
her image flickers
and wavers
she's worn much too thin.
if you pass by
the door too quickly
you might miss the fact that she's even there
sometimes though
if you stop to stare
and you look hard enough
you might think you see
her laughing
and loving life
but not today,
and if you miss her smile
like I do
and reach out to touch her...



© Copyright 2000 fc - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
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1 posted 2000-01-28 10:14 AM


fc,
You captured the feeling, enjoyed the read.

Toerag
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Ala bam a
2 posted 2000-01-28 10:15 AM


As usual.....just another fine job gal!
RainbowGirl
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3 posted 2000-01-28 10:16 AM


FC: Nah, I'll give her a huge hug and squeeze her so much she has to smile or wince with pain...*g*

HUSG

 Feed your dreams with love...

suthern
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4 posted 2000-01-28 11:03 AM


Yanno... there is no fairness!!! Life kicks you in the teeth and you write great poems... Same thing happen to me and that wraith would be rivaling the Goodyear blimp! *G*

Well done!

fc
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5 posted 2000-01-28 11:09 AM


thanks all, and big hugs back RG  ...and suthern, "wraith" just doesn't describe me....lol...now, if I could just write great poems when I am smiling ...lol...guess you can't have everything...sigh
JTF
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6 posted 2000-01-31 04:22 AM


Nah, with such legs it can't be a mirage ...  
Iloveit
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7 posted 2000-01-31 09:27 AM


well what can I say....*dang cookies again* ok.....fc says thanks JTF, she needed a monday morning smile  

[This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 01-31-2000).]

hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 2000-01-31 09:43 AM


Your poetry speaks so strongly to me. Wonderful work as always
dovesongs
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9 posted 2000-01-31 09:48 AM


In one word...WOW!  Such feeling, speaks volumes in so few words.  I love it. Very touching.

 

Marge Tindal
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10 posted 2000-02-02 09:44 PM


FC-
I like this a whole lot.

By re-reading it I found two entirely
different interpretations.

One being of a mirage of a loved one
that you miss and want to see.

The other was so reminiscent of a
family I know whose wife/mother is
stricken with alzheimer's ...
someday's she laughs with easy-remembering ..
'but not today'.

Touched my heart, you did.
~*Marge*~



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Balladeer
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11 posted 2000-02-02 10:54 PM


I wish I understood better.....but, then again, I never was too smart.

The poem is excellent.

Denise
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12 posted 2000-02-02 11:59 PM


This is wonderful, FC! I too read it from two different perspectives as Marge said. From either view this is superb!

Denise

Elizabeth Santos
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13 posted 2000-02-03 02:02 AM


I read this to be an alzheimer's patient, a mother. But in any interpretation, this is beautiful
Liz

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14 posted 2000-02-04 01:50 AM


fc, so heart grabbing nad beautiful.  It is amazing how so many people go unoticed if we are too busy to pay atention, but if we stop to care we see so much beauty in them, but sometimes we realize that too late.  You said so much in this beautiful poem!  I am going to miss your poetry while I am gone.  Take care of yourself!

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*


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