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its a mirage
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its a mirage |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
sitting there in her chair her image flickers and wavers she's worn much too thin. if you pass by the door too quickly you might miss the fact that she's even there sometimes though if you stop to stare and you look hard enough you might think you see her laughing and loving life but not today, and if you miss her smile like I do and reach out to touch her... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
fc, You captured the feeling, enjoyed the read. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
As usual.....just another fine job gal! |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
FC: Nah, I'll give her a huge hug and squeeze her so much she has to smile or wince with pain...*g* HUSG Feed your dreams with love... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yanno... there is no fairness!!! Life kicks you in the teeth and you write great poems... Same thing happen to me and that wraith would be rivaling the Goodyear blimp! *G* Well done! |
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fc Member
since 2000-01-18
Posts 130 |
thanks all, and big hugs back RG  ...and suthern, "wraith" just doesn't describe me....lol...now, if I could just write great poems when I am smiling ...lol...guess you can't have everything...sigh |
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JTF Member
since 1999-08-09
Posts 319France |
Nah, with such legs it can't be a mirage ...  |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
well what can I say....*dang cookies again* ok.....fc says thanks JTF, she needed a monday morning smile [This message has been edited by Iloveit (edited 01-31-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Your poetry speaks so strongly to me. Wonderful work as always |
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dovesongs Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 102Michigan |
In one word...WOW! Such feeling, speaks volumes in so few words. I love it. Very touching. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
FC- I like this a whole lot. By re-reading it I found two entirely different interpretations. One being of a mirage of a loved one that you miss and want to see. The other was so reminiscent of a family I know whose wife/mother is stricken with alzheimer's ... someday's she laughs with easy-remembering .. 'but not today'. Touched my heart, you did. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I wish I understood better.....but, then again, I never was too smart. The poem is excellent. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is wonderful, FC! I too read it from two different perspectives as Marge said. From either view this is superb! Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I read this to be an alzheimer's patient, a mother. But in any interpretation, this is beautiful Liz |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
fc, so heart grabbing nad beautiful. It is amazing how so many people go unoticed if we are too busy to pay atention, but if we stop to care we see so much beauty in them, but sometimes we realize that too late. You said so much in this beautiful poem! I am going to miss your poetry while I am gone. Take care of yourself! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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