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When you said,"I'm Going Away." (For J.D.) wherever he is
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When you said,"I'm Going Away." (For J.D.) wherever he is |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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Yes I read it, Love Those words Black on white The ones you thought so impersonal It wasn't the first time I had read those words before So I tried not to panic. You thought you were free of me once before, But I halted your efforts With a final explanation That I believed not the rumors, And a number where you could reach me. Yes, that stopped you in your tracks, Love. Then one day through all the talking and trust You said," I'm leaving her for good this time, And only I had faith that you would. Not that you did it for me. I knew it was for yourself And was the only one who could sense your determination And truth. Now... An e-mail of all things slaps me in my face. "I'm going away" That is how it began. Well, you did And still we speak on occasion Each time I remember whispered nights Forbidden for me then Because after you left her You were free from that guilt. You apologized for heartache I said you never caused me. Its been a while now since I've called. But unfailingly on cue to my distant voice I'm cute in your eyes all over again And you try to melt me By calling me "My Sweet" You always did keep your promises. Now I'm left with contemplation Of our past. Don't gain my affections and cover my eyes. In blindness I will only swing harder. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Dear temptress Wow this was soo deep. very good tracie  |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Hmmm... very nice poem, but a dilema ... here's to careful deliberation and good luck!  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Hi, Temptress, my friend. A deeply emotional outpouring, hon. Seek the love that doesn't tear you down, the heart that only lifts yours, where darkness and guilt dwell not. This is where happiness is found. And thank you again for telling me about his great family of poets! Corinne |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Nicely done, Temptress. And I agree with Corinne....seek the love that doesn't tear you down for the kind that does isn't worth the time or pain. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, Temptress. You want some of my rhyming elixir? I'll share it gladly for a dose of your free verse excellence  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Excellent work, Temptress!! |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Thanks everyone. I thought this one would sink fast. Corinne: You are welcome of course. I'm a walking advertisement for this place in chat rooms sometimes. I'm glad to see you here and also glad to see you enjoying yourself. Balladeer: An equal exchange then? There are side effects ya know! Free-verse is addictive. I won't be held responsible. *winks*Don't gain my affections and cover my eyes. In blindness I will only swing harder. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hm... where to start, eh?? I hope he's well... That really does concern me sometimes, ya know?? |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Nan, thanks for reading this. I think he is well. At this point, this poem seems selfish, but occasionally I get the most distant of friends on my mind. Like something is prompting me to reach out. Like they might be needing a shoulder. Does that makes sense? I believe there is a connection to friends. Don't gain my affections and cover my eyes. In blindness I will only swing harder. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Well, this poem isn't sinking that fast, cause I'm bringing it to the top again. You are right about your distant friends. We all need a lifeline at times, and there's nothing more soothing than hearing from an old friend. I liked the poem, you can be torn between emotion and reality at times. In this case, reality probably wins Very well written Liz |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
just been searching. . . you never know what you'll find back here. . . I know where this one comes from. . . ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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