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Denise
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0 posted 2000-01-23 02:03 PM


    
In the moonlight, shadows dancing
By the sea the night sings lovely
Melodies that cast a knowing
Warmly soothing that engulfs me
Surely there could be no other
Place on earth that’s near so charming
As the sea

It can cause a heart to flutter  
By the shore the night’s disarming
As the moonbeams dance so brightly
On the waves that roll and tumble
Then surrender ever gently
To the deep and I'm made humble
By the sea

In this place of rare discover
I can refuge from all trouble
For the shadows warmly cover
Me and calm the heart of tremble
Shadows, you’ll be gone by daylight
Moonlight charm's for night romancing  
By the sea

Shadows dancing in the moonlight
In the moonlight, shadows dancing
Dance with me


< !signature-->

 Denise

And slight is the sting of his trouble
Whose winnings are less than his worth;
For he who is honest is noble,
Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~





[This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 01-25-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Denise - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2000-01-23 02:09 PM


Wow, Denise this is wonderful!  You are blooming.
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2 posted 2000-01-23 02:27 PM


Denise-

As usual ... you shine.
Shadows dancing ... so devine.
~Marge~



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3 posted 2000-01-23 02:33 PM


What a wonderful mood you set with this! I love it...would love to live by the Pacific Ocean too...sigh! Guess I can dream!
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4 posted 2000-01-23 02:41 PM


Oh, Denise, now this is really beautiful!!!

In the moonlight, shadows dancing!!!
beautiful.  

so where's your pic?   gone!< !signature-->

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge




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Denise
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5 posted 2000-01-23 05:09 PM


Thank you, Martie, Marge, Sharon and Dark Angel for reading and commenting. This piece is different for me and was quite a challenge. I'm glad you liked it!        

Dark Angel - I put my picture back since you asked!

Thanks again, everyone!

Denise


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6 posted 2000-01-23 05:13 PM


Slendid poem...  creates such a beautiful mood with such a wonderful flow to your words.   *applause*
wish all you females wouldn't show up us poor males attempting to meet these challenges...  you're giving me an inferiority complex...  *smile*

Denise
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7 posted 2000-01-23 05:25 PM


Aw shucks, Mike, What a lovely thing to say! But I must say your primose in the moonlight was beautiful beyond compare!  

Denise

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8 posted 2000-01-23 10:08 PM


Wow denise...moonlight dancing and the sea...what a beautiful backdrop you've created in this one. I'ts lovely. Applauds....challange well met. Interesting array of poetry I've gotten from this challange
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9 posted 2000-01-23 10:19 PM


Wonderful, Denise. When you're through with those shadows, may I have the next dance?
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10 posted 2000-01-23 10:22 PM


Oh what a lovely dance you took me on....Beautiful  

 
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people kill people. That's and animal instinct. I think breaking
into someone's home and ironing all their clothes is temporary
insanity.



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11 posted 2000-01-23 11:08 PM


I'm dancing, I'm dancing!  

Wonderful work, Denise -- a lovely ocean scene you painted for us here, and all awash with dancing shadows and moonlit waves.  What could be better?  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest


Denise
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12 posted 2000-01-24 12:26 PM


Thank you, Ruth, Balladeer, David and Kess for reading and commenting! I'm glad you enjoyed it.


Balladeer - I've saved the next dance for you!

Denise

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13 posted 2000-01-24 01:13 AM


I don't think I have ever heard the sea being discribe so beautifully.

You truly touched my heart with this one...
Thank you

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14 posted 2000-01-24 01:15 AM


Denise you make me want to run for the water! Excellent!

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there is love.
Where there is love,
there is peace.
Where there is peace,
there is GOD.
Where there is GOD,
there is no need.

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Denise
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15 posted 2000-01-24 11:39 AM


Thank you, One Who Understands and Rebecca for reading and commenting! I'm glad my love of the sea came through in this!!

Denise

fc
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16 posted 2000-01-24 12:02 PM


yes it did denise, this is beautiful  
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17 posted 2000-01-24 04:15 PM


Denise, very beautiful.  I would say you passed this challenge with flying colors  

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*


Denise
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18 posted 2000-01-24 10:47 PM


Thank you, FC and Melanie for reading and for your kind comments!

Denise

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19 posted 2000-01-24 10:54 PM


Beautiful as always!

Corinne

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20 posted 2000-01-25 01:56 AM


Hey "D",

Very soothing poem.  I can actually hear the wind blowing and the waves gently crashing onto the sand.  Very nice imagery.  I liked this one alot.

Jfreak

tracie66
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21 posted 2000-01-25 03:05 AM


I loved this poem...I was their with you with every word
Perfect...tracie

Denise
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22 posted 2000-01-25 11:09 AM


Thank you, Corinne, Jfreak and Tracie for reading and for your kind comments! I'm glad you liked it!

Denise

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23 posted 2000-01-25 12:56 PM


Denise, What a beautiful poem! Very visual and romantic. I LOVE IT! ONE OF MY FAVORITES, FOR SURE.
Liz

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24 posted 2000-01-25 02:15 PM


Wow, Denise! This is a very beautiful poem.

 Nathan

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25 posted 2000-01-25 02:31 PM


Denise, I used to live within a stones throw to the Pacific. I'm only a few hours away now, but with the kids,the dog, the husband,the chores... ugh.... I miss it desperately. Thank you for taking me "home". Beautiful.-SEA
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26 posted 2000-01-25 06:37 PM


Thank you, Elizabeth, Nate and SEA for your warm and wonderful comments! I'm glad you liked it!

Denise

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