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Tramp Poet
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 754
Could Be Anywhere...

0 posted 2000-01-22 11:16 PM


    Damned Crows

The parade has passed by
clowns gone, crowd walking away.
Watching a wind twirl a wrapper
lonely claims another day.

We laughed long ago
youthful dancing until dawn.
Cleaning crew begins their work
feeling unhinged, something wrong.

Twirling batons, colorful floats
majestic in their rolling march.
"Talk of the town", say ordinary
voice long unused, raspy and harsh.

Mother shields at the sound
pulls a smile, questioning along.
The loneliness comes crashing in
broom pusher whistling our song.

A turn with tears, stinging, angry
hunched with gait; shuffling, slow.
The others don't know, pray never
"never more" gloats the crow.

Copyright reserved 3/97 by D.J.Burt


  there is only one...
Romans 10:9-10

© Copyright 2000 Daniel James Burt - All Rights Reserved
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
1 posted 2000-01-23 11:55 AM


I can't believe no one posted to this...I enjoyed it...especially the final lines  
JOY 14
Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419
Wisconsin USA
2 posted 2000-01-23 12:02 PM


I liked this, not because I related to it, and not because I knew the subject, but just because I did.  

 JOY


Tramp Poet
Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754
Could Be Anywhere...
3 posted 2000-01-23 01:08 PM


thanks, Hoot.  Shall i address you as Hoot?
yes i was equally shocked to see no replies...perhaps the Poe reference frightened off potential posters?
thanks again, have been greatly encouraged
by all your encouragement!

appreciate your input, Joy
i kinda liked this one myself (rarity)
most people that know me in real life
think i've led this intense, tragic
life...lol don't believe it tis fiction.
anyway, thank you again.

bleeding


  there is only one...
Romans 10:9-10

PhaerieChild
Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787
Aloha, Oregon
4 posted 2000-01-24 01:46 AM


Hey dude!! This is rather Poe-ish. I don't think that should put anyone off though. And since I know you very well, not everything is as non-tragic and non-intense as you'd like us to believe LOL. Love you lots bro. and really like the post even cloaked in all it's sadness.

 Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream.

Shawna R. Holder
Boise, Idaho



One Who Understands
Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251
Cedar Rapids, Iowa
5 posted 2000-01-24 01:49 AM


This one was a rereader...just wonderful
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