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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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Damned Crows The parade has passed by clowns gone, crowd walking away. Watching a wind twirl a wrapper lonely claims another day. We laughed long ago youthful dancing until dawn. Cleaning crew begins their work feeling unhinged, something wrong. Twirling batons, colorful floats majestic in their rolling march. "Talk of the town", say ordinary voice long unused, raspy and harsh. Mother shields at the sound pulls a smile, questioning along. The loneliness comes crashing in broom pusher whistling our song. A turn with tears, stinging, angry hunched with gait; shuffling, slow. The others don't know, pray never "never more" gloats the crow. Copyright reserved 3/97 by D.J.Burt there is only one... Romans 10:9-10 |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I can't believe no one posted to this...I enjoyed it...especially the final lines  |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I liked this, not because I related to it, and not because I knew the subject, but just because I did.  JOY |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
thanks, Hoot. Shall i address you as Hoot? yes i was equally shocked to see no replies...perhaps the Poe reference frightened off potential posters? thanks again, have been greatly encouraged by all your encouragement! appreciate your input, Joy i kinda liked this one myself (rarity) most people that know me in real life think i've led this intense, tragic life...lol don't believe it tis fiction. anyway, thank you again. bleeding there is only one... Romans 10:9-10 |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Hey dude!! This is rather Poe-ish. I don't think that should put anyone off though. And since I know you very well, not everything is as non-tragic and non-intense as you'd like us to believe LOL. Love you lots bro. and really like the post even cloaked in all it's sadness. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
This one was a rereader...just wonderful |
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