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Magical Moment (Challenge from Saxoness)
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Magical Moment (Challenge from Saxoness) |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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Time seemed to stop not a sound could be heard. My heart stopped it's beating no one uttered a word. Chills coursed through my body. I stood with delight. Tears flooded my eyes. The darkness seemed bright. His feeble little fingers wrapped around my single one. I snapped back to reality and got the fetal surgery done. That moment was so magical that I never will forget, the way he held my finger tight the instant that we met. OK I want to give you the gist of the challenge so you can understand it better.... "Recently I recieved an email from my sister that included a mind blowing picture. It was a story about a pregnant mother who's child had spina bifida. The child would die unless he recieved a new type of surgery in which the doctor would operate while he was still inside the womb. Well, the doctor performed a C-section and made a small incision in the womb...and right before he began to operate...that small 21 week old baby stuck his perfectly formed hand out and grasped the doctors finger. A picture was taken at that moment...and it came out perfectly clear. It was the most breathtaking thing I've ever seen. So, Echo, my challenge is to write a poem...from the perspective of the doctor in that very moment. ~Saxoness" ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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SnglDad Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 115Seattle area |
Wow, You have put the beginning of a life into word`s and in such a way that I`ll never forget this story. Great Job  Hope Mom and her child are well? Thank you for sharing. God Bless Joel |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
Extremely well done and such a neat perspective! Earthman |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Echo, you did so well ! Amazing ! ! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I saw that challange Echo and wondered what you'd write...challange well met. May give this one a shot myself |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thank you all, this didn't come out like I expected but I think it gets the feelings accrss. Ruth, I jsut got done reading yours and I must say it is FAR better than mine is! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, too, Melanie! It captures well that magical moment!  Denise |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Echo.... I just read Hoot's .....yours expresses the feeling just as well. Amazing. I enjoyed yours very much!-SEA |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Wonderful! Reading the poem brought tears to my eyes....as did seeing the picture. Challenge well met, Echo! "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Beautifuly written, I don't see where it didn't turn out right, I got the feeling before you explained...as always, wonderfully done!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beatiful! How precious life is! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I missed the challenge, but WOW!! Excellent job in portraying what happened! Amazing, just amazing! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is really excellent, echo! |
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