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Who`s Outside Your Window?
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Who`s Outside Your Window? |
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SnglDad Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 115Seattle area |
It`s late at night And Im all alone, Who`s outside my window? Dog`s are barking And kid`s aren`t home, Who`s outside my window? Roof top rumble`s The back door shake`s, Who`s outside my window? Wind`s are howling A tree limb break`s, Who`s outside my window? I look to see And there he is, A stranger outside my window, I try to scream But there`s no sound, He`s coming thru my window, I reach for something There`s nothing around, He`s entered thru my window, With his hand He take`s my air, I can no longer see the window. Mommy,Mommy A child cries, I wake and close my window. Just a dream No one dies. WHO`S OUTSIDE YOUR WINDOW?? SWEET DREAM`S [This message has been edited by SnglDad (edited 01-23-2000).] |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I am thankful I am not easily frightened. This could make most fearful people's skin crawl. This is all to real a threat in our society. Very cute to add the sweet dreams. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Well that was one heck of a nightmare! Whew! Well done, Joel! Denise |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Hmm whose outside my window? I wish I would have known that answer last night LoL, but thats a different story...shhhhhhhh the secret is aliens....Hmmmm however I wouldnt recommed this poem for the easily frightened, but its great, suspensful! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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SnglDad Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 115Seattle area |
Thank you, Marilyn,dsnyder and Echo  I wish all of you the best on your writings. Take Care and God Bless. Joel [This message has been edited by SnglDad (edited 01-21-2000).] |
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A Friend New Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 7 |
Dad I think this is cool I was going to put it back up under my name with a different title,just to see what would happen? Love you dad and cool poem Jr. [This message has been edited by A Friend (edited 01-22-2000).] |
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simplyYRREHS Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 162 |
Joel... (I am the easily frightened)...but with that aside, I think this is a great poem. I love the style. The repetition tends to build the tension with every new thought. VERY VERY thought provoking...and in today's society, a very serious thing...I will double check the locks tonite! Great writing! Sherry"Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads." ~Henry David Thoreau |
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SnglDad Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 115Seattle area |
Thank you Sherry. Your replies mean alot to me. Everyone should alway`s lock up before going to bed. Thanx again everyone for the kind words. God Bless Joel |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
There's always a little guardian Angel outside my window  Nice poem Joel ! |
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SnglDad Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 115Seattle area |
Thank you for your reply Munda. Joel |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
SnglDad.... I try not to think about what's outside my window, but I will now! I liked this.- SEA |
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SnglDad Member
since 2000-01-08
Posts 115Seattle area |
Thank you SEA, Im glad you like this one. I wasn`t sure what kind of responce I would get with this one. Joel |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Very creative full of suspense Thank you Richard |
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Bad Boy Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 78 |
It wasn`t me outside her window.  I was peeping in a different neighborhood. Good job.  |
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