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What remained was you
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What remained was you |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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What remained was you She came to me from shadows Where on the wall they dwell. Danced across the floors meadow From where the shadows fell. The magic from down under, Seemed to make them come alive. And I stay in wonders wonder, At the splendor and the drive. Illusion took my hand in heart, And I rose and danced with her To the magic it impart, In a shadow waltz of blur. And scented myrrh came to bloom Filled the room from sky to floor And ecstasy did consume, For my heart could fill no more. And when the scene did dim from view, The only thought remained, was you. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, What remains is another exquisite poem to add to the collection, and I'm adding this one to mine Love Liz |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Beautiful, Seymour... especially the last 2 lines... they leave me with a happy sigh. *S* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
So lovely Sy and the last line really got my heart. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ahhhhh....this is so precious and tender, Sy! I love the way it made me feel!! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I absolutely loved the sweet feeling this gave me!! Very nice, SY!! Take Care Bridgette |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
"For my heart could fill no more"...beautiful poem, Seymour...I feel as though my heart would burst, reading such a wonderful poem. Always enjoy your work!  May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sir Tabin: What a nice view of something that is usually treated with dark intent. My compliments for a piece well done. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Sy, I'm 'sighing' again....this is beautiful! And like Suthern and Martie, your last line touched my heart too.. A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When the title of the poem drags a reader in, and when the words drip from Sy's own pen, never ask the whereof on the trip he takes you on, only ask the Lord he ne'er lets Sy be gone. Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Very nice the poem I read almost a tear I shead I do have a similar one That as a shadow (so it's title)begun I can relate so much to this Poetry is sure bliss Ps Yours is better < !signature--> The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. [This message has been edited by HelmutB (edited 01-18-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Absolutely beautiful!!!!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, You are the sweetest Elizabeth I know. Love sy. Suthern, Well then happy sighs to you. *L* Sy Martie, That was my aim, thank you. *L* Sy Denise, You make me feel the same way with your answers. *L* Sy Just, thank you so much for the very nice. Satiate, Wonderful words, thank you. Andrew, Thank you for the well done. Pepper, It's always delightful to touch a heart. *L* Sunshine, For the wonderful answer you get two *L* *L* Helmut, You are a faithful reader, thank you. Hoot, You are my very favorite Owl. *L* Sy |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
Sy, so beautiful..and I did shed a tear! Tamera |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Ahh, exactly....this is incredibly beautiful..I love it Sy.  Keep it up! *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour- This is extremely lovely. I believe I smell the fragrance of the scented myrrh in bloom. Such romance from such a romantic heart. Love ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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