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Pannin' fer Rhymes
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Pannin' fer Rhymes |
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Kevin Taylor Member
since 1999-12-23
Posts 185near Vancouver, BC, Canada 
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. Well, now, It was sometime in the spring o' 98 Jist 'round M'morial Day 'n th' Land o' Freedom... 'er so they call it. Anyways, I was sittin' up 'hind them hills... Y'know, nexta where God 'n' Hell musta had some sorta fuss 'er 'nother. Sorta desert. Sorta not. An' I was pannin' fer rhymes - I kep' comin' up dry - when alluvasudden straight outta the ground there's this tinklin', twinklin', musical sound. So I eyeballed the pan and gave her a twitch. Some verbs an' an adjective peppered the dish. Good stuff, I s'pose, fer a yarn they'd bin fine, but not fer perfessional-lookers-fer-rhymes. So I flipped em a toss an' caught 'em agin T' see if that tinklin' mightn't be kin t' th' one that I found t'other side o' that night. It'd had t' be good, er it wouldn't fit right. Them poets won't shell-out fer less than a pair Cuz one by 'tself leaves 'em pullin' their hair. So ya gotta find more than a couple that fit Er poets 'll fake it 'n some 'll jist quit An' some 'll jist hope no one says that it's... Y' know... Call 'emselves "nou-veau" 'n claim it's legit. 'Nuffa that, I s'pose. I look fer them twinklin' musical words that rhymes like the first time they's ever bin heard. I sure ain't the first one 'ats panned 'n 'em hills. M' pappy before me turned up a few thrills N' somewhere er 'nother done found a whole line. But me, I ain't happy 'nless it'll rhyme. They're there, I c'n hear 'em, jist tickle the breeze! I'll stick it out long 's there's poets t' please. If ya 'spected a yarn, er t' hear miners cuss - I's pannin' fer rhymes an' not dirt 'n a dust! Hmph, wha's 'at ya got there? Kevin "Poetry is, at once, what you get... and how you got there." |
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Anne Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 78 |
You've struck gold with this one! How original! |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Oh gosh, I loved this! Very nicely done! Lovely! ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
This is cute Kevin. Enjoyed the read.  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Nothing more challenging or more rewarding in my book! This is just wonderful Kevin! I like your style! You've got a great wit! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Very, very well written, and entertaining! Unique both in idea and style. Excellent! Dale and I laughed and laughed. Thank you! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Cute little ditty you've struck with this one!! Enjoy your unique style! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Kevin, I really like the humor, style and vernacular you've employed here...and how you begin your rhyming lines "alluvasudden" with the tinklin' twinklin' discovery of a few verbs and an adjective. I loved reading this one aloud!  Claire |
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