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Crying In My Sleep (Challenge from Saxoness)
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Crying In My Sleep (Challenge from Saxoness) |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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Lovers are dreamers and I've been crying in my sleep. When I awake, I'll never take a chance that I can't keep. A thousand first times never add up to last, and I've been told a heart of gold melts away too fast. So look me in the eyes you fool what is it that you see? Do you see the hurt deep down from all you've done to me? It's bad enough you hurt my life but the hurts now in my dreams. I guess I should have realized that nothings as it seems. You took my heart, broke it in two made promises you couldn't keep and now I'm left here all alone just crying in my sleep. ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ [This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 01-17-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Well, seems you've met the challenge splendidly!! Denise And slight is the sting of his trouble Whose winnings are less than his worth; For he who is honest is noble, Whatever his fortunes or birth.~~~Alice Cary, ~Nobility~ |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
That is beautifully written as always Echo!!I've been away from here too long!!! This place brightens my sorrows!! Take Care!!  Bridgette "It may take a boy to turn a girl's head, but it takes a man to turn a girl's heart." |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Melanie excellent poem here! Strong emotions and wording! Very well done! <*\\\>< Where there is faith, there is love. Where there is love, there is peace. Where there is peace, there is GOD. Where there is GOD, there is no need. Hallmark |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thanks Denise Bridgette, yes, you have been away too long, glad to see you back! Rebecca, Congrats on the 3,000 posts, and on my poem too yeah!! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I'd say challenge well met, but I think you've done more than that here! This is a beautiful show of emotion Mel, I loved it! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
wonderfull, enjoyed the read very much thanks Echo. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Echo , This is sad but very good , Thanks for the read |
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Lisa Graham-Marshall Junior Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 23Nottingham. UK |
I can relate to this poem with all my heart right now..Thanx for the read |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thanks everyone! Glad you all enjoyed it! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Bravo! Challenge well met indeed! If I had written it, I couldn't have found a better way to do it than you did. I like it!< !signature--> "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot [This message has been edited by Saxoness (edited 01-17-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
well done Echo!!! |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Saxoness...Glad you liked it. I was going to make it a lot different than this, but I didn't like how it came out, then i wrote this and hand hurt too much to try and write another one LoL. Though Im sure its something a lot of people can relate to (if they understand it). Thanks for the challenge! Thank you Ruth!! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Very well done!, I don't know how I missed this one til now. I hope this poem isn't true but if it is, writing helps, and how beautifully you've done that. Liz |
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simplyYRREHS Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 162 |
So very well written! The rhythm of the poem, the flow of the thought...I enjoyed this emensely. Sherry"Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads." ~Henry David Thoreau |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Liz, In a way yes, in a way no, kind of complicated! Thanks for the compliment Sherry, Thank you most kindly! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great poem, Echo! I can really feel your emotions on this piece! Nathan |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A challenge well met Melanie!! and so beautifully written. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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