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My Achilles Heart
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My Achilles Heart |
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Shrinking Violet Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
From here to the tip of the Greater Antilles, we know the myth of the Greek called Achilles. We know he was dipped in the River Styx by his mother to save him from Jove's final fix. We know that she carelessly covered his heel and so sealed his doom with no room for appeal To the Gods who guided his enemy's arrow; how else did it reach a target so narrow? Fact or a fiction of Homer's invention, the tale of Achilles deserves current mention. In my case, you see, against all odds and without the help of vengeful Greek Gods, A sniper scored with a toxic dart straight to the cusp of my unmanned heart. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Very nice, Violet! I hope you didn't wind up with a heel!  |
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Shrinking Violet Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
Don't worry Balladeer, I cut all heels down to size. |
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Rus Bowden Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139 |
Hi Violet, I like the almost instructional way you relate the tale of Achilles and call upon the reader to make the parallel at the end. Nicely laid out. Enjoyed this, very much. Rus |
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Shrinking Violet Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
Thanks Rus Bowden for your appreciative remarks. Glad I studied my mythology. |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
i like this alot... a very different type of emotional poem that gives me a new perspective to look through...  sincerely, **jerome the boy whose brain got left out in the rain and nobody bothered to dry it off when they put it back in |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I really like this poem... We all have our hidden Achilles agenda, don't we... Have I mentioned that I'm glad you're here? We really need a good shrink around this Passionate Place.....  |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is great I like this alot , Very different |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Yeah! Mythology reference and how beautifully woven in too! Lovely. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Shrinking Violet Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
poetry kills - Most of the time, I do not know the effect my poetry is having on other people. To give someone a new perspective is gratifying. Nan - I would like to be my own shrink, but the feedback I get from this group of poets makes me realize that I need other people. Whiskey, Astraea - So thanks for the feedback you have provided. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I've got to hand it to you, the title alone just sucked me in. This whole poem is very original, and I loved the last stanza. Thanks for sharing! Mike |
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Shrinking Violet Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
Thank you, bsquirrel, (Mike) for your message. Your appreciation came at the right time. |
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Shrinking Violet Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
I have tried to send my thanks through to you, bsquirrel, but it hasn't been recorded. So I am trying once more to tell you that I appreciate your appreciation. |
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