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Critical Analysis #2

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kauai
Junior Member

since 2003-05-18

Posts 12

0 posted 2003-09-17 03:42 AM

Inside I Cry.
"Don't overreact"
When you cannot hear,
you cannot reprimand.
When you cannot see,
you cannot judge.

Inioth
Junior Member

since 2003-09-18

Posts 12
Calgary, Alberta

1 posted 2003-09-18 12:25 PM

I like it, short simple, obviously meaningful and heart was put into it. And that's what I like when some effort is put into things. Especially poetry, some people I feel like telling hey go back to the drawing board come back when you have something....but no I liked it...very nice

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

2 posted 2003-09-20 07:27 PM

This works but in a most curious way. It is impossible to judge this because so little has been given, so much hidden. Thus, the style actually manifests the theme.

Nice trick.

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