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grassy ninja
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since 2003-07-20
Posts 41
Kentucky

0 posted 2003-08-19 11:57 AM


It's as early as a song, the copyrighted hour.
Whatever it was, there was a hint of
Notice.  This hour does not go unobserved,
Does not get cropped off every April,
Or encored in October.

It makes us weak with wants
With embraces cheek to cheek,
and orphaned mouths missing
Words and kisses.

Our jigsaw hands sauntering
Like icebergs over what it is
Appropriate to touch without telling.

Horrible to wait, your scientific touch
Foaming over my cuts.

A clean stinging, an hour that asks no questions.

"Trust thyself: every heart vibrates to that iron string" -Ralph Waldo Emerson

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rose
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since 2003-08-02
Posts 53

1 posted 2003-08-19 05:37 PM


hmm....i must say i liked this poem quite a bit...you had so many great images, but you scrambled them a little to make it much more interesting and complex.  i especially loved the first stanza, and was impressed with the whole poem in general.  good work.
~rose

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