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My Beloved Friend.

bgryan
Junior Member

since 2003-06-16

Posts 30
North Ireland

0 posted 2003-06-20 09:15 AM

Come alive my love
and live your life.
Open your eyes
and take my hand,
my beloved friend.
Come into the light
and dance upon the sea,
no tears will fall
beneath your feet.
Arise my love
my fair one,
my beloved friend.

[This message has been edited by bgryan (06-21-2003 06:54 AM).]

Ladybug
Member

since 2003-06-17

Posts 236
Massachusetts

1 posted 2003-06-20 06:26 PM

Hi bgryan! Welcome to PIP (I'm new too, as of 6/17)

This is a very sweet poem, your friend is lucky! One correction: "and live your live." -- should be "and live your [life]" I assume? Good job

Every new beginning comes from some other beginning's end...

cynicsRus
Senior Member

since 2003-06-06

Posts 591
So Cal So Cool!

2 posted 2003-06-20 11:44 PM

B.G.,
Simple, heart-felt emotions stated clearly enough to hold my attention.
Thanks for sharing,

Sid

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