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The Music of Goodbye

ESP
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since 2000-01-25

Posts 2556
Floating gently on a cloud....

0 posted 2003-06-09 08:40 PM

The Music of Goodbye

The music of goodbye
The silent melody
In every word we say.
The tear in every smile,
Each touch burns me
With the joy of pain.

The music of goodbye
The cacophony
Wreaking havoc within.
This is the song I sing,
To the image of an
Immovable soul.

The music of goodbye
It is our harmony
The tug-of-war we play.
Moon never meets ocean,
Though entwined they be
Dancing eternally.

The music of goodbye,
Sinister Polyphony
Side by side far apart.
My heart singing again
Music of my destiny
The music of goodbye.

"Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~

raevynsbreath
Member

since 2003-06-06

Posts 64
Mi, USA

1 posted 2003-06-12 07:51 PM

this is good. really good.
watch punctuation though. it was a bit lacking.
well nice job.
hope to see more from you.
good evening.
_rae

Cytten
Junior Member

since 2003-06-13

Posts 16
Canada

2 posted 2003-06-16 12:37 PM

wow... I mean it wow..
I have this music teacher that is resigning and this poem touched me I hope I can guive a coppy to her if it is ok with you. she was the best teacher I ever had

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