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Critical Analysis #2
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raevynsbreath
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since 2003-06-06
Posts 64
Mi, USA
0 posted 2003-06-07 06:01 PM



(everything is centered in this left-handed vibe.)

i'm sitting on a chair with no back
staring at a wall, pouring sand down it's crack
getting over something that won't leave my mind
it's walking away quickly, leaving me behind

i'm screaming, louder than i thought
i'm being scolded, another lesson to be taught
fighting for a belief
i've only lived once

so here it is
time for crusification
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V. Tomir
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since 2003-06-08
Posts 20
1 posted 2003-06-08 01:07 AM

Mrs. Raevynsbreath

You are killing me with this stuff. What are you trying to say and whatever wisdom you are trying to impart on the reader could you try a little harder to make it somewhat interesting?

Regards.
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