Critical Analysis #2 |
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need a title |
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jaidyn New Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 1 |
the dreams have stopped bending my mind has stopped spinning through all the states of melancholy the music reels me i hear your voice on the other side floating, falling, crashing like the tide fading away, taking me down down that neverending spiral leaving me wired everynight i want to melt fade into you and when the music stops i can hear it all the silence of the music keeps me going keeps us going going nowhere all the time.... |
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pintsizedpoet New Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 1Wisconsin, US |
How about Sound of Silence or something like that? |
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brianm Junior Member
since 2002-11-22
Posts 16Colorado |
'the note' or just 'note' (like a music note...) |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Hi, Welcome to CA. It's nice that you participate. I have some advice in reference to your poem. Please check your email. God bless! Radrook |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Hi Radrook, If you have some advice, how about sharing it in here? After all, critique and advice is the purpose of this forum. Taking it outside pretty well defeats that putpose. Thanks, Pete Never express yourself more clearly than you can think - Niels Bohr [This message has been edited by Not A Poet (11-26-2002 01:44 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, Jaidyn. Please check your E-mail for a Special Greeting. Karilea |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
I like to use phrases within the poem when choosing a title. How about this one: "Going Nowhere" |
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